Us

Becky Payton and I

Many men are at times misled

as most could be thought of as blind

Measuring by what they won't do

instead of to whom they were kind

Attempting to build an empire

judging themselves by what they deny

Thinking them best who resist temptation

be it a crime for a man to cry

No hungered child is a lost soul

nor a beggar be taught how to live

By preaching morals to the poor

we take from whom we should give

Goodness is not what we won't do

nor a question of who we exclude

It is an unselfish act of Humanity

to see ourselves in those we include

Author's Note

How many times do we walk by those we could so easily help?

Reviews

[Charles]

Five stanzas of near perfect poetry. Each stanza is a self-contained lesson (parable) and they are tied together by the title and pictures. The styles of individual lines are consistently interesting (stilted language in some ways, archaic in other ways, but all working together for the overall effect of the theme). And, a good theme - God's work (if you think God needs an apostrophe to help His work, check line 16. Great work on this one.

[MissWordSmith]

very nice. :) :) i am touched by this

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the faces of the old people. Tells stories of a life. Photos were beautiful. A outstanding poem. I believe we need to put our selves in the shoes of others to understand life. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

Great pictures. The lady's eyes are haunting. She has a question and an opinion sitting there. She would be a great person to talk with.

There is a pretty good message in this piece. Thanks for sharing it.

Stanza 1: you will want to watch out for unintential rhyming at odd places. misled ... said. What I try to consider when writing things these days are meter / bounce, rhythm and flow, euphony, what is actually said, does it make sense, and the story. As said earlier, good message, good story in this one.


Thanks for sharing this piece. Cheers!

[gimpy]

I love the poem it's rely great I often fill the same way when I walk by the homeless or "needy" a great poem again tate

[Tracie Skarbo]

OMG this is so powerful and true to the point!!! I love the photos too...so much said in them. Wonderful and I hope that with your words more eyes are opened to the plight...

[Haifa]

Great poem, I like it

[Jenny Nelson]

An excellent thought and write. Even the smallest and simplest of kindnesses can make a big difference. We all need to lose the blinders.

[Luna]

This is very true and when people walk past sometimes they just blow them off, sayng that they put themselves in that place. Great write.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was a nice poem. I thought it was great. I loved it. Thanks so much for sharing. :)