Beautiful Bliss

We stand unafraid of the night.

 

 

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Ambling along the endless beach.
We gaze into the imminent night.
Knowing the melting sun will leave.
Only to return at first mornings light.

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The pounding waves of the ocean.
Tell a tattle tale story of life.
Promising to last for eons to come
We forget our daily strife.

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Shadows cast beauties glow.
Upon the face of one so fair.
Telling me of your glowing soul.
Wrapped in the light brown hair.

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The cooling sands beneath our feet.
Like the countless worlds out there.
Stars peak out from shimmering darkness.
As if night lights from God to share.

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Misty fog rolls off the coast.
Dancing in an unknowing way.
Telling of things we can only dream.
Like a grand mysterious ballet.

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Of things we know so little about.
We hold to each other tight.
Assuring each of the others love.
Stand unafraid of the imposing night.

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Resting our souls upon the sand.
We build a fire to light the sky.
Showing the way home to ancestors.
And the one that caught my eye.

Tate

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Author's Note

A memory of a night on the beach

Reviews

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

I would not have gone with the music choice. I understand the titling of the music works with the imagry of the picture choice. The tempo seems off as compared to the poetry.

Stanza 3, line 4: you use "the" instead of a possesive pronoun when the rest of the piece is about a shared experience. In this instance I recommend using "your" or "her" light brown hair. It doesn't interupt the meter and adds to the flow.

Stanza 5, line 4: you use "mysterious" which throws your meter off. You can add an element of older English flavor by using "mystery".

I like what where you were going with this one and what it looks like you were trying to do with it. I like the ABCB rhyming structure. It can be fun to work with. What throuws me though is the uneven meter; at places 8, others 9 or 10 syllables. Unless you are going for an uneven, disjointed feel, the poem will have limited appeal due to no sing-song rhythmic pulse. It is the pulse that helps people enjoy poetry; that and the story that pulls at the heart or makes the reader think.

Thanks for sharing this.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nothing better then a fire, the beach and good company. A beautiful poem. The description and the story was outstanding. Made me wish to fly to the California coast and never leave. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Aww this is a beautiful piece. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing. It was lovely. :)

[harman kour]

a very soothing poem... imagery is great! The description of the mysterious night along with the sea waves, the wind and the sands on the beach was perfect!!!! Beaches have always been my favourite and the most inspiring for me... It was a pleasure to read this...

[An owl on the moon]

You always create the most beautiful landscapes with your words! Absolutely wondrous poem highlighted by the stunning photo.