I wish to thank you, from the depths of feeling hammocked in reverie of sweetness.
This poem was first read silently without Etta James's At Last in the background-
The first time I read it, I felt the most peace I have felt in a long time- just for coming across a stranger's poem but feeling enraptured by some certain unknown uncertain nostalgia of what it's like to be a child and see the world through a child's eyes, precious, a little girl is always dreaming of holding in her tiny palm the hand of a special boy who at that first rose blushing, only thinks upon his face as hers, at last, somewhere hovering above in Heaven's distant, and now close- dream.
This poem is surreal.
These lines brought tears to my eyes:
No less the beauty decades since
In her face the child I could see
...and then of course, rereading it a second time with the first of melody-
brought life to me.
Very very well written! This is such a light and flowy poem (if that makes sense) it is sweet and has a gentle nature to it! I found it very refreshing!! Great write!
Oh, and I love the picture in the beginning! Very cute!
k. the photo made me giggle for the sweetness, the words made me sigh for the longing .......... of such tenderness and a place in his heart. what woman does not secretly wish to be so lovingly remembered and achingly revisited. your last lines are killer -- seems to be a habit with you ..... as someone once said to me ~ "like a jab to the gut with an air knife, soft but potent." beautiful.
This is an amazing piece as always. I've fallen in love with your writing. I do not think I have ever praise anyone as I praise you for your work.
"Aloof and careless with herself
Walking high upon nature’s wine.
She poured her beauty on my soul
No woman was ever so fine."
This stanza has to be the most beautiful and the most vivid. I can actually picture it. Well done Tate. As always.
Hm, very beautiful, it's happy, but at the same time has a slightly... Hm, I can't find the right adjective... sad, perhaps? Maybe? I'm not quite sure if that's the word I'm looking for.
You're words are magnificent, they come to life in my mind, creating a beautiful picture. It's overflows with bitter-sweetness, I felt so touched by the emotions it made me feel. Marvelous, at the very least.
You don't need to worry about whether or not this poem is good, because I assure you, it's perfect. I always thought that a poem needed only one thing for it to be considered a good poem, and that was emotion. But yours gave so much more, it was so natural, the words flowed, it had such incredible imagery, I felt as though I could paint what I saw in my mind, there was not one awkward pause, not one moment that made me want to stop reading.
You, to say the very least, are an incredible poet. I commend you for a job, very well done. Thank you for sharing such an amazing piece. I loved it.
wow this is beautiful poetry. A very unique love story unlike many typical "cheesy" writes you see far too often. The words you choose add such an easy fluency, great imagery, your poetry never ceases to amaze.
You can write a beautiful story. Photo made the words alive. Life would be better if we could hope and dream like a boy. Every touch and emotion important. Every line added up to a excellent poem.
Coyote
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