Loneliness

Someone starts to sing a song

and it makes me think of you

Just a sad, simple, melody

both you and I once knew

 

As the words drift by my ears

a kind sadness fills my heart

The song has much more meaning

as time has kept us apart

 

I try to see your face again

to think of things unsaid

But all I can remember

is this song inside my head

 

My memory is failing now

oh so sad, but oh so true

All that's left of our sweet love

is this song that we once knew

 

Author's Note

How can any of us say we are not afraid to die?
To see another waste away is such a painful thing.Yet we still see them as we wish to remember them

Reviews

[MagiCrystal]

A memory is a life time storie and the names of the people does not meter, what meters is like you said.. The feeling that brings us a smile or a tear.
I had to stop all that I was doing tonight! and sit here and read with my heart and soul your poetry, you have ask me many times to come and read it so tonight I had some time.
You are one of the people ( poet) I know that writes about songs and feelings and real life facts, I do understand.
When we love.. we love, ! we do not think of nothing else but to give and forget about our self, In this verses you wrote I read them quite a few times, each line over and over again.
The heart has the ability along with the mind, to takes us to the very second where we left that memory and re-lived the memories. Our minds are made in such a perfection that not one detail escapes with time we have files up to date and we never make mistakes unless we want to. How perfect is our brain and heart that even when time goes by so fast but, when that musical note hits our mind. Bummmm! There it is again and our yesterday's are in our today's and they can come and visit our present in a flash. It goes by so fast and leaves us exhausted and full of love and sometimes pain.
I can't even begin to tell you how much I love to come and read your poem, it brought tears to my eyes ( Again and Again) You my friend have that gift to touch a very tender part of my soul and heart.
I can't stop looking at the image and thinking about my Mom and Dad. For some reason that was the string you touched... and you will continue to bring me to my knees every time Oh yes !!! I will come back and read this. Divine, simply divine.
If I may say.. the best poem I have read today .. Sunday and I will go and open my library to post this poem on my top shelf... I am going to save it in a very tender special place for this amazing poem you have wrote and I thank you.
Not everyone can bleed and not hurt when a poet as you displayed his words in a such a deep feeling for us to feel.
Again.. one more time. You have got me glued ! No surprise to me I knew you will do it again. Off I go to read another one of your pages..I love to do that!

[Eternally Elemental]

Amazing. It captures that reminiscent moment when you hear a familiar sound. Kind of sad in some moments but beautiful. That love can exist through the years and can be relived through senses.

I love the simple language. It makes it so honest, as if there is no reason to sweeten the feeling. It is what it is and it cannot be described in any other way. Beautiful.
This is going in my favorites.

[Jacqueline Lopez]

It's really, really good.

[Seashell]

Love it, love it, love it Tate. Music is everything to me and hundreds of songs have left hundreds of memories in my heart n soul therefore I can appreciate this beautiful poem to the max !!
Thanks for sharing.
Babs xx

[Patricia Gayle]

Absolutely beautiful! I loved it. I've read a couple of your peoms now and they have all been amazing.

[Lizzy]

how sad but truly lovely!

[Ebb and Flow]

Brings tears to my eyes. A song can have so much impact on ones life. Even if you forget everything else the music/song will remain. It's beautiful and melancholy at the same time. As always I envy your way for writing about love.

Krys

[Zarathustra]

Amazing
beautiful.
Just perfect, and I loved reading this over and over again...

[Helena Parris]

Deeply moving and so beautiful. The speaker's grief and love shines through with dignity and a sense of peace.

[Coyote Poetry]

Th flow of words was amazing. I like the story in the poem also. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Salvatore Buttaci]

The poem itself is very good. That said, let's look again at your misplaced punctuation/

Some suggestions you can take or leave:


Get rid of the period after the first line here:

A sad, simple, melody.
That both you and I once knew.
__________________________________
Get rid of the periods except the one after "heart" and after "apart." Put a comma after "ears," and after "now" put no punctuation mark.

As the words drift by my ears.
A kind sadness fills my heart.
The tune has such meaning now.
As time has kept us apart.
___________________________
Put a comma after "again." Get rid of period after "remember."
No period after "love."

I try to see your face again.
To think of things unsaid.
But all I can remember.
Is this song inside my head.

My Memory is failing now.
Oh so sad, but oh so true.
All that's left of our sweet love.
Is this song that we once knew!