Life

                                                        

                                                     Tatertot

I wonder where the songs come from

watching children skip all 'round

Playing like time had no meaning

as snow fell upon the ground

 

 Man's last words are never of work

nor to rule the entire world

They wish they'd spent time with others

as enlightenment's unfurled

 

When you rush along through your day

throwing out gifts un-opened

The dreams your parents had for you

the ones that go unspoken

 

Take time out of your stressful day

and try not to dance so fast

 Life is not a race to be won

sadly the music won't last

 

Tate

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Author's Note

The chance to dance upon this world is granted to us but once. Don't live the last half in regrets of lost moments from the first.

Reviews

[harman kour]

This is what I was looking for... Its so inspiring!!! Beautiful thoughts and beautiful words Tate... You always come up with something that's so overwhelming... There's so much to learn from you!
Time just slips through our hands and life just passes by when we are so busy planning...
Gifts un-opened, dreams unspoken... these are wonderful expressions!
Thanks for sharing! :)

And you have beautiful kids!!! :)))

[Jenny Nelson]

Such a beautiful and true piece. It does make one stop and do some reconsidering. Wonderful pictures as well. Somehow, there does have to be a less stressful way. Wonderful write encouraging us to go find that way before it's all over.

[Andrew]

Very amazing poem! I feel the same way and have written about similar thoughts but not was gracefully as you have put it here!

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

Very Innocent and well said and very true sounds like how i live my life i love Living this way cause we might miss some thing of never geting to do it in life will be too late i am a Big kid. i Will be having my 31st Birthday this month march 27th the baby of the family but i cant wait Lovely write this is how life should truly be live. Blessing and thank you for sharing my friend i truly Enjoyed this

[MoonlitAngel]

Very deep. I love your writing. Keep up the amazing work.

--Blood

[Lynn B Glover]

I found your poem "Life" to be very enlightening. I like the structure and the rhyming of the verses. A very good write. Keep up the good work. Your friend Lynn

[Samuel Dickens]

The songs they hear are the music of life. As we age, we lose the ability to hear some of those songs; some of us becoming more deaf than others. I was confused by this line: "No man's last words were are of work." Should it be "...last words were of work"?

[M.Kilani]

Quite impressive yet lacks some deepness , the rhyme scheme was good yet broken after the third stanza which somehow weakened the poem , yet it's still good perhaps better as lyrics more than a poem , the modern style is good as well , good piece mate
well done
I like the title which reminds me of an article of my own I'd surely like you to read , please follow this link http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Kilani/525872/ and please feel free to share it if you like

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Poet,

This is a very beautiful message and philosophy on life. For indeed, life is very slow and yet as we live longer, it picks up. My favorite stanza is the third one where it talks about our last words are never of selfish thought. Last words of great people are interesting.

No room to critique, side from parts where you could have added a question mark or a period. The flow is quite elegantly portrayed. The -B-B rhyme sequence is nice and easy for this writing, as it flows from stanza one to stanza five. I remember a song "The Cats In The Cradle" as written by Ricky Skaggs, that makes me think of this poem. That our lives shouldn't be too important where we our passing by the things that truly matter in life: neither work or stress. Well done. 9.8/10.

As a friend, a writer, and a poet,
S. W. Scaggs