Dear Lord, this was so beautiful I swear it touched my soul. Every line is like a burst of overwhelming beauty the not only encourages but pushes and tugs at the reader to read on and crave more. Honestly, I was breathless by the end of it, my eyes were absorbed by each word as was the rest of being, reading this was an experience I wouldn't mind having a few hundred times more. Thank you for sharing.
-Cathrine
'I need so few of this world's goods' ... love it. This is the philosophy we all need to live by...all of us. Of course all the fat cat capitalist b******s will hate you and the rest of us who think the same as you, because they can't turn a dollar, euro, yen, from this philosophy. But if we are to survive as a species your philosophy and not the capitalist win-succeed-win-succeed-kick-a*s-win-succeed-win-success-wealth-eat-the-weak attitude is the way. Gentleness in a man is all.
Tate, those are great candid shots of your kids. I like the one of your son. That is a really good picture. You can crop that down a bit and showcase it as an 8x10, matted and framed. The photographer has a good eye.
I love the story and the sentiment. It is very heartfelt. The meter and rhythm throw me though. It does not have a structured feel to it.
The music is too context high for me but probably touches you emotionally to the poem, the moment, and your kids. In broaders appeal, find those things that move you that may move someone else. Find the point of commonality and express through that. You will have people returning to your peotry often when you do.
Thanks for sharing this. I can tell it is close to you.
This truly was a beautiful piece :) I think, though, that the flow of it was a bit interrupted in a few places. 'So numerous I can't count', could be cannot count to help fix a little of that. But, leaving out my little nit-picking, it really is heart warming to read the love you have for your children, and how they are your life's treasure :) The ending stanza is my favorite. Thank you for sharing!
this poem so poignantly describes your affectionate emotions towards your children and it's the same with every parent... They have selfless love for their children which are their priceless possession! Great poem yet again!!!
Very beautiful! This is so sweet, and I hope that your children do you have the chance to read it. They are very, very lucking to have such a loving, devoted father. Lovely work! It's perfect!
the greatest treasure,the greatest measure,found in a child's eyes,
the gift of unconditional love,answering all the questions and whys...
Good work here too my friend...the memories this poem bring up...Thank You for sharing
There is not a job on the planet I could adore more than being a parent..
What a beautiful expression of your love for your children you have written here.
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