Dear Lord, this was so beautiful I swear it touched my soul. Every line is like a burst of overwhelming beauty the not only encourages but pushes and tugs at the reader to read on and crave more. Honestly, I was breathless by the end of it, my eyes were absorbed by each word as was the rest of being, reading this was an experience I wouldn't mind having a few hundred times more. Thank you for sharing.
-Cathrine
I absolutely love this poem, it is so beautiful. Children are life's treasures, and you have been truely blessed........................................................congratulations!
I look forward to reading more of your poems.
Dear Lord, this was so beautiful I swear it touched my soul. Every line is like a burst of overwhelming beauty the not only encourages but pushes and tugs at the reader to read on and crave more. Honestly, I was breathless by the end of it, my eyes were absorbed by each word as was the rest of being, reading this was an experience I wouldn't mind having a few hundred times more. Thank you for sharing.
-Cathrine
Your Children are lucky to have a dad like you, who loves them and sees so much in them.
It is truly a wonderful write, an insight to what the future can hold if your lucky enough.
River
. to live it, feel it and sense it ... is all that matters ... and it's sheer magic all the way ... they're beautiful and these verses that you write for them are invaluable ... whenever they turn back and revisit the past ... these are the moments that'll shine and fill their recollections with hope and bliss ... overwhelming memories ...
Beautiful! I don't know how many times I've said that regarding your poems. But you have a unique ability to convey your emotions without ever sounding melodramatic. Your poems are always sincere, and from the heart. I always feel compelled to comment upon your poems when I read them. I like all the lines here. I'm sorry for not offering any constructive criticism, because I can't think of any, unfortunately. This is a great poem.
I won't comment on the story behind the poem. The only thing that needs to be said is, that your kids are beautiful; as is the writing that accompanies them.
I will however, say that I felt the 2nd stanza was a little weak,
"I need so few of this worlds goods
having all your thoughts, ways and deeds
They lift my soul to the heavens
where I plant loves garden of seeds" - the "thoughts, ways and deeds" lacked force to propel the "soul to the heavens" in my opinion and the "deeds" - "seeds" rhyme felt a little forced to me.
"But oh such beauty none the less
before God I could not recount" - is truly one of a kind :D
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