Bottle of Rain

The end of one love is the beginning of another.

I've come to bury the last of love

beneath this willow tree

In the deep forest I went

where no one else could see

___________________________

Held within this bottle of rain

are the tears I cried for her

The many nights I couldn't sleep

as I dreamed of how we were

___________________________

I'll place on it no pictures

spin thrice to forget the way

Save in me the pain she flowered

leave the dark for light of day

___________________________

I'll never visit her again

forever play all day in the sun

But night when no one else is there

I'll cry of her as the one

 

Tate

 

Author's Note

Yes Virginia I must have a heart. I think it's broken

Reviews

[Shelly Braen]

Such quiet and sorrowful pictures you paint. I feel as if I walk through your pain with you and feel the breeze within the willow you buried her under. Such a shattered heart makes everything so quiet, no? Such a strong piece, with the focus of a single journey, as a tear from eye to ground. I weep with you.

[Miss Coral]

Beautiful and haunting in a way... very well written, though the last stanza's flow was a bit off for me. Overall, nice piece.

[HighBrowCulture]

gilbert osullian is a hybrid of genius and heart shaped bruises.

[MagiCrystal]

" Quotes it's about little wisdom winks, like a short form of words, mix with a little wisdom, and about 3 lines ! yeah please !!!

[Bear]

what a sensitive, aching write! I'm thinking back on places travelled when my heart was aching so.... not bad memories for the pain has faded over time and smiles will appear upon my face recalling the good times past.

Fine write indeed. Thanks for sharing and reminding me. Sallie Bear

[qaralynn]

great poem..sad and beautiful

[VioletRose]

Wonderful poem,
Good luck in my contest

[Helen Crutchett]

OMG this was a perfect poem Tate. Ouch, now I'm tearing up again, painfully close to the bone, but a wonderfully amazing write from you as usual. Good luck in the contest!

[Charles]

One of the tightest and most perfectly rhymed of your poems that I've read. Really a nice writing and the image of a bottle of rain holding tears is superb. Also liked the spinning three times so as not to remember the way back. :-)

[Tina Kline]

A very sad yet beautiful poem. I really like it a lot.
Thanks for entering it in my contest.

[razholandr]

Such a sad piece with a slight cute quality to it. I really liked it :) Very nicely written!