Bottle of Rain

The end of one love is the beginning of another.

I've come to bury the last of love

beneath this willow tree

In the deep forest I went

where no one else could see

___________________________

Held within this bottle of rain

are the tears I cried for her

The many nights I couldn't sleep

as I dreamed of how we were

___________________________

I'll place on it no pictures

spin thrice to forget the way

Save in me the pain she flowered

leave the dark for light of day

___________________________

I'll never visit her again

forever play all day in the sun

But night when no one else is there

I'll cry of her as the one

 

Tate

 

Author's Note

Yes Virginia I must have a heart. I think it's broken

Reviews

[Shelly Braen]

Such quiet and sorrowful pictures you paint. I feel as if I walk through your pain with you and feel the breeze within the willow you buried her under. Such a shattered heart makes everything so quiet, no? Such a strong piece, with the focus of a single journey, as a tear from eye to ground. I weep with you.

[Lox]

Such a clean rhyming scheme. I read this aloud and in my head and I pronounce it smoothly refined as is such a great poem should be. I like how its in red too for some emphasis on emotion although I feel its more anger than love.

[Tate Morgan]

Thanks lox it was a painful time

[likesgreeneggsandham]

I think you'd have to be without a heart to not feel this one. Beautiful, romantic and touching - and yet without pretension. A very fine line to walk when writing romantic poems, I think. As someone going through the loss of a romance the finality of it speaks to me. It's over. Move on. Or at least try to. Thanks for the great read

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you it never really leaves you

[Rye]

I felt some pain in this write, not sure what thrice means, I did like this, found this heart tugging. Love that song.

[Tate Morgan]

thank you thrice means three times In other words spun in a circle till i was dizzy and lost my way back

[Rye]

okay, thank you.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Bottle of Rain"
Tate Morgan,
It is amazing that our lives are capable and flexible to move and bend through all the experiences and situations which we find. The heart can hold love and move through the old things to the new. I liked your message of coming to terms of the end of what was once real to you. Tears placed, (figuratively?) in a bottle of rain and then poured out. This poem reminded me of the memorial of ashes scattered there in a place of solitude. Beautiful poem of ongoing life and not giving up.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you Kathy . For every beginning there is an ending. No sense putting it off That only denies us time to find another

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Tate Morgan,
It's good to be aware of reality. Time is surly part of it. One thing we cannot control but we can try to manage ourselves within it.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Heartbreak well described...

[Tate Morgan]

Hi Tomas thank you sir

[wordman]

tate this is certainly a great write my friend,loved the music
hope you win

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you wordman i always was partial to this one it is so barren and empty

[wordman]

yeah it could be a tear jerker

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

Yep I can relate to this all too well as it describes my current situation. Loved every word and the picture added to the visual stimulation.

[Tate Morgan]

thank you rico I am sorry to hear that for you

[Jamestown]

This was all together, beautiful. What a touching piece of work.

[Tate Morgan]

thank you jamestown I wrote this about a girl from ireland ireland

[Ed Fagan]

Beautifully done. you can feel this.

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you Ed thank you very much