The Secret

A Dream

Becky

Happy 14th Anniversary.

 

I dreamed three words within my mind

that longed to touch her heart
Each a third of the love
I had felt for her from the start

I'd hid these words I'd treasured so
praying they would only heed
But needing love they wanted out
to touch the soul they'd freed

So now at last I let them fly
as all would freely do
That she might know the first be I
the others Love and You

Tate

                     

Author's Note

The answer to all who seek it. The eternal valentine !!

Reviews

[Magdelena]

This was stunning! I saw so much in you piece that I felt as if i were reading one of my own. To hide behind ourselves, as I know many of us do, including I! Then to suddenly feel that freedom to come forth and speak of what is in our hearts is a feeling of re-birth. Like being a child again and finding their first joy in life and running with it.. That's what I saw in your piece. The feelings of 'at last I am free'


Fantastic!


Magdelena xx

[mia!mia]

awwww wow! that was so sweet and compelling. it was obvious that it was written form truth and conviction. like a little piece of you for us all to read!

[ABitBrokenPoetry]

brilliantly written. so simple, yet i love the last stanza, how you pieced together the words 'i love you' in such a beautiful fashion. a gorgeous write!

[Kaylee Andurs]

The only reason we hid our feelings is because we are afraid of rejection or of being hurt. How freeing it is when we finally speak the words and find we are loved even greater for taking the chance.

[Lunar Lightning]

I think everyone goes through hiding their feelings for someone. Great job.

Luna

[~LeeAnn~]

I can see someone standing in the shadows trying to hide his love....Great write.....really

[GYPSYLEAH]

Lovely - That says it all!!

[Jae]

YOU ARE BLOODY BRILLIANT!!!
god this poem is so romantic.
its so beautiful and you certainly have a very great talent
maybe someday you will be up there with some of the greats. (thats how much i like it)

~Rem

[Martin See]

your beautiful poetry softens even the most hardened hearts...it's refreshing to read love being expressed in this manner...'what the world needs now is love, sweet love...' takes me back to a time when it's still possible to speak like that without strange looks..."each a third of the love" is a clever line very well expressed...emotive and romantic :))

[LisetteCanWrite!]

What a fresh and unique rhythmic way to tell someone you love them.. it seemed almost like a chant or lullaby to me.. so sweet! I could really feel the flow.. rhyme was superb.. thank you so much for sharing! =)