The Secret

A Dream

Becky

Happy 14th Anniversary.

 

I dreamed three words within my mind

that longed to touch her heart
Each a third of the love
I had felt for her from the start

I'd hid these words I'd treasured so
praying they would only heed
But needing love they wanted out
to touch the soul they'd freed

So now at last I let them fly
as all would freely do
That she might know the first be I
the others Love and You

Tate

                     

Author's Note

The answer to all who seek it. The eternal valentine !!

Reviews

[Magdelena]

This was stunning! I saw so much in you piece that I felt as if i were reading one of my own. To hide behind ourselves, as I know many of us do, including I! Then to suddenly feel that freedom to come forth and speak of what is in our hearts is a feeling of re-birth. Like being a child again and finding their first joy in life and running with it.. That's what I saw in your piece. The feelings of 'at last I am free'


Fantastic!


Magdelena xx

[Ebb and Flow]

So similar to my own only yours was shorter and sweeter. I can feel a sense of wanting to tell but a sense of hesitation at the same time. It's so beautiful.

[Liza]

i love the anticipation described here of those three simple words we all long to feel and hear.

[theunknownchick]

:):) aww. This is (like always) very well written. The flow is great and the poem itself is a great piece. Enjoyed and liked it
>Erika

[emmajoy]

Romantic, brief .. because, after all, only three words are really needed and you've said them gently, clearly.

[Tina Kline]

Better to tell someone how you feel,
at least that way you will know if they
feel the same and were perhaps hiding
their feelings for you. The fear of
rejection holds us all back, sometimes
its well worth the risk!

Excellent write!

[Nautili]

there is a proverb "Open rebuke is better than secret love." I am glad you shared your secret with her, instead of keeping it to yourself......loving is risky but worth it.

[Emily B]

sweet sentiments. . . would be a lovely greeting card

[qaralynn]

aaawh really cute poem :)
great work

[Sagela]

Aww that is a sweet and cute poem. I like it. It reminds me of a little kid who is too bashful to say anything but finally says it and is proud. Fantastic job on this piece