A Lesson Learned

How kind her teared eyes that hid the truth; from the lips that would never confess.

 

Rode the train with my girl today

across the barn swept hollows

Past lush fields of emerald green

with the life and love that follows

 

The train car tapped out a lullaby beat

which spent our time lost in leisure

The smiles past came by with the peace

life's sweet gifts we couldn’t measure

 

A man had set across the aisle of us

he seemed so different from me

Clothes tattered, torn and weathered

homeless and likely worn hard was he

 

I couldn’t help but to take the notice

his features hewn and deeply lined

Drawing a map of where he'd been

red eyed he looked half blind

 

Something alone in his vacant stare

said It was me that he resembled

The thought had taken me a-fright

I looked hard, long and trembled

 

I saw my lover look over him too

noticed the hair might be the same

Except for straggling beard and decay

I had felt a deep sense of shame

 

Could that be what would happen to me

what fallen angel had led him astray

A nightmare vision of life’s full truth

eyes of pain in the heart they betray

 

Then my lover looked back upon me

her thoughts she sought hard to repress

How kind those teared eyes that hid the truth

from her lips that would never confess

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Author's Note

An introspective mirror of myself.

Reviews

[Shelly Braen]

This piece holds unmaginable beauty! The seasoned timelessness of such a beautiful, yet solomn journey through the eyes of such a man, yet the thought that they might be yor own looking back at you from the differences of eras. How could a person be more beautiful than the man sat in front of you. Wonderful! Simply wonderful!

[Robyn]

i find this poem to be beautiful and enchanting.

[linalove]

i really liked this.

[Desert Dreamer]

The idea that we see reflections of ourself in other people is a good one, one that provokes much thinking.

[ebonpinion]

Lovely imagery that kept me drawn to the poem.

[Hamkar]

Very deep and thought provoking. I love the description of the man

"I couldn’t help but to take the notice
his features hewn and deeply lined
Drawing a map of where he'd been
red eyed he looked half blind"

Although you are describing the man's life, by the reactions of the character you can tell a lot of his life too. This is really beautiful writing.

[zee]

Wow. That was deep.. and beautifully written.

[Abdul Aziz]

This is indeed thought provoking. I thought it was going to have more to do with homeless people. But you decided to use that basic premise, to build something more substantial.

"A man had set across the aisle of us
He seemed so different from me"
These two lines hold a lot of meaning. Sometimes, if our real self presented itself to us, we wouldn't even recognize it. We sometimes live in self deception. Sometimes, we just don't know what happens to us. But we change. And we don't know how.

"Something alone in his vacant stare
said It was me that he resembled
The thought had taken me a-fright
I looked hard, long and trembled"
These lines form the crux of the poem. The realization of what we are, and what we have become can be really hard sometimes.

And then comes the perfect conclusion:

"How kind her teared eyes that hid the truth
from her lips that would never confess"

Awesome!

[the_stoic]

as always a thoughtful write .. thanks for sharing

[Ashley.M.E]

A smaller font would have made it a little easier to get through... Other then that I love the song you choice xD. Ok now the poem. This is a really good poem, sounds more like a story, but still the detail and flow are perfect for a poem. Other then the large font that made me half to scroll down alot. It's a really good poem, nothing I would change.

[Krishna]

Amazingly written .. the imagery and power of your descriptions really give the piece a feel most elusive. I also like how the poem ended, well done.

One small thing that I noticed though .. I believe the word in the first line of the third stanza should be 'asile' .. but that's it. Again, amazing job! Loved reading it and look forward to reading more of your work.