The night comes when there are fewer days ahead than behind. On that night you realize the folly of your misspent youth was really the joy of your life's adventure. To that I raise a glass and say "Hell Yeah he really lived! Goodnight Dad
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oh Tate that sure is one of the best poems I've read as I love the song as well. Your words as usual penetrate the soul. Life is a journey, and we all may go astray, wandering in roads never taken before, or roads that were taken by others yet they seem so unfamiliar as we don't learn from others' experience all the time .... Lost hopes, sorrows and tears moan inside your heart only to awaken some hunger for a ray of light that would sure give you the rebirth feeling. No matter how long we try to hide from love, it sure finds a way to us, without asking for our permission. The wind, the sun, the spring and the storm ... all those words are only an excellent choice for the flow of your feelings that was easily sensed all along your poem ..... sorry it was too long but it sure hit me hard that one. Loved the photo toooo :D
I will sure vote for this one as all the rest can't even stand the level of comparison ... you got m.. read moreI will sure vote for this one as all the rest can't even stand the level of comparison ... you got my vote
10 Years Ago
How endearing to read such a devout write on a subject we both share thank you
10 Years Ago
No need to thank me, what touches the heart is what is based upon sincerity and truthfulness. Excell.. read moreNo need to thank me, what touches the heart is what is based upon sincerity and truthfulness. Excellent ink ...
Beautiful, Tate. And sorry for your loss. My parents are gone, too. I know the feeling. There is a void, now, that will never be quite filled. And, in fact, we learn, I think, to respect that void.
All my best wishes.
Rick
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you Rick being a father myself and this being Father's Day the feelings brought up are truly m.. read moreThank you Rick being a father myself and this being Father's Day the feelings brought up are truly monumental my only hope is that I did him justice whether I did it not it is one of my best and shall have to stand for my soul in the end thank you for commenting it has been a while since I wrote and since we spoke
8 Years Ago
Hi Tate I can't imagine that your Dad wasn't proud of you. My best regards, Dear Friend!
First let me say, I'm sorry for your loss, which I know must still be quite fresh in your heart. Your poem is a beautiful tribute, altho I can't really say I can see or feel anything about your dad from this poem (just a personal preference, not a criticism of your approach to the topic). The way I read it, stanza 2 prevails. I'm guessing you are keeping a little distance from a full & vivid outpouring of your feelings, by crafting this perfect formal-sounding tribute, with notes of sorrow as well as hope, but definitely not too specific. I apologize if my observations are too harsh, especially considering your loss & the clear fact that this is a perfectly-expressed tribute that us mere mortals only aspire to! (((HUGS)))
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
You are correct in that i showed less personal sorrow as It is such a internal thing to share. I wan.. read moreYou are correct in that i showed less personal sorrow as It is such a internal thing to share. I wanted to immortalize his memory Not my pain.
Thank you I have to say it sure makes you feel like you are next in line to the river Styx as you fi.. read moreThank you I have to say it sure makes you feel like you are next in line to the river Styx as you find the one who once towered over your life is now gone and from the ashes is born a new thought You are now alone
9 Years Ago
And that could be another poem in and of itself.
9 Years Ago
i have been thinking along those lines as i stand on the precipice. I have a son only 19 yet and am .. read morei have been thinking along those lines as i stand on the precipice. I have a son only 19 yet and am already a grandfather three times over by my other daughter Jessica
well done! top notch ... your language is elevating for me .. in reading and listening to the music i find myself easily placed in a small country church ... with hushed sighs of sorrow and joys .. i think your dad is very very proud of you Tate .. and thank you for the link that brought me here :) so symbolic as i see you and others placing his ashes at the start/finish line ... apparently so much a part of his and your family's lives ... such a beautiful and worthy poem ..
E.
Thank you I really felt it appropriate for his story to be bigger than life as the best of the track.. read moreThank you I really felt it appropriate for his story to be bigger than life as the best of the track are storytellers and his end will be remembered as a party not a funeral where his spirit left out on the same wind from which it once blew in
~I just saw your status message, you have my deepest sympathies Tate. It is never easy to lose a dad, the patriarch of the family. By your words It is clear he was a special guy. But I think that goes without saying. I wish you and your family all the best in this difficult time~
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you Relic it is a hard thing too quantify
9 Years Ago
When my mother died I thought along the same lines. Grief is never easy for anyone, it takes time fo.. read moreWhen my mother died I thought along the same lines. Grief is never easy for anyone, it takes time for it all to settle in.
9 Years Ago
yeah it does and like all great wounds they never heal and they become a part of of our character
Exactly. Perhaps somehow that is a gift in disguise. Your father raised a good son, I'm sure whereve.. read moreExactly. Perhaps somehow that is a gift in disguise. Your father raised a good son, I'm sure wherever he is, he is proud of you Tate.
9 Years Ago
I shall take that on faith as you are a good friend and hope you are right .Thank you
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