My Immortal Soul

I watch my son embark on life

and I wish him all the best

His way will be no easier

than it's been for all the rest

 

The first child's life is the hardest

as they blaze their new found trails

Upon their shoulders rides the weight

of siblings, hopes and travails

 

An old woman once asked of me

as she touched upon my fears

"What do you want your son to be

when he reaches adult years"

 

I thought a while then with a smile

said that"happy" was my goal

"There might be hope for mankind yet

and for your immortal soul"

We might just ask too much of each

newly born generation

 Expecting them to build upon

the previous foundation

 

It's pride that tweaks our vanity

in damned pride our soul believes

Why is it only through this pain

that by love, our soul relieves

  I'll have that old woman to thank

when I swim the great expanse

There I'll make for the distant bank

where fate may grant me that chance

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Author's Note

The weight we place upon the shoulders of our children is also a heavy burden we carry upon our own souls. Knowing they will try to reach those expectations, whose fault is it really but ours if they cannot? We give them the gift of life. Then try to lead by example. However we can only hope we have done well by them and headed them in the right direction. Let happiness be your guide!

Reviews

[zainul]

I dedicate my reverence to Tate Morgan who presented this masterpiece for the community of humans engaging their talent and time in WritersCafe.
This poem has envisaged a popular discussion which has already earned about 80 reviews ans 800 views.
I feel proud that Tate has become in his right a great preacher for the good of family,children,tradition and heritage.
Reading all the amazing reviews,I am convinced to say that the world still belongs to pure human beings,not to the fictional characters like vampires,wolves,ghosts and aliens.
Family bondage,love among parents and children,social norms and values and responsibility of parents to their children and vice versa still make the world moving like an entity.
Tate created this poem instilling all good characters of good poem with rhymes which he specifically mentioned in his note.This is a lesson for all of us who choose perfection.
He tried to add other elements to amuse his readers too.The portrait of a happy child in a field of cereal makes me so happy that I feel myself in the paradise.
The addition of wonderful music video to entertain the readers reflects his taste of classical heart.
I agree with all reviewers what have been noted here for the benefit of our children.I strongly feel
that this poem along with its precious reviews is a great symbol of benevolent poetry.

[Tate Morgan]

What could I say to that fine review that wasn't felt in the reading of it? Truly a genuine and benevolent gift .I I feel honored and humbly thank you
Tate

[zainul]

I feel honored that you have accepted this humble review.
Thank you very much.

[intuitivesoul]

Hello, Mr. Morgan. This is by far my favorite writing from you. It is phenomenal in my opinion. I am indeed a friend of Ms. Katie. I would like a short conversation with you if your not pressed for time. Only having a smart phone to use comes with limitations to my abilities on this site. Replying to messages is not one of them. If you don't mind email me at [email protected] my name is Matthew but feel free to call me Matt, either is welcomed. Thank you for your time.

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I have an older half brother, but he did not live with is growing up, so kind of I was the oldest, and I know my path was much harder than was my younger brothers. My father had more forgiveness and tolerance for me than my mother, maybe because of my half brother. But not being a parent myself, I do not completely understand the burden a parent carries, yet I know the pain I caused both my parents growing up. Still to this day I struggle, while my younger brother prospers.
This piece invokes so many emotions of a parent that I myself cannot understand personally, but can see from a point of view that opens my eyes to what my own parents feel. You write with such a passion, and feeling of love. There is no other way to describe your work. There is always such a tender part that can touch any part of the soul, in my case of the child, such as myself. I know my parents feel the burden of my troubles, and I know they want to see me succeed.
Thank you Tate, again for such a wonderful touching piece, that not only opens my eyes, but made me see a little more of my own parents burdens.

[Mic]

Is most true. Probably too much pressure for my eldest, but she survived and prospered... with happiness. Good meter, rhyme, just an inspiring read.

Very well said!

[Sakshi]

Brilliantly written. Very touching!!
Love it!

[David Scott]

My son inspires me as well. Thank you for you fair and balanced view. We all to often see mankind using their children to achieve their own selfish dreams instead of creating the love and acceptance for them to find and define their happiness. We do see the hope of our immortality in our children. Beautiful poem. You are very uplifting to read! Thank you.
Be well

[Sahar moonlight]

Thanks alot for writing such a poem full of meanings that show the real way to keep bonds ib a successful family.
The deep and clear meanings in one time made the poem an absolutely awesome one.

[FocusedAmnesia]

I really liked the second verse of this piece, being the oldest child and all. Another great piece.

[shallimarRose]

Awww yes a thank you to mom and the parents.. wonderfully crafted piece from the words to the form to the choice of music.. xo

[Nae Nae]

I can relate to this so much, having grown up with parents that didn't push me to any type of life besides the one that leads me to happiness. A parent that only wants genuine joy for their child is a parent that is making the right decisions for that child. Allowing them to make their own decisions and only guiding them on their journey through life. This is a wonderful piece and I truly enjoyed it.

[Jadey]

I totally love this!