My Immortal Soul

I watch my son embark on life

and I wish him all the best

His way will be no easier

than it's been for all the rest

 

The first child's life is the hardest

as they blaze their new found trails

Upon their shoulders rides the weight

of siblings, hopes and travails

 

An old woman once asked of me

as she touched upon my fears

"What do you want your son to be

when he reaches adult years"

 

I thought a while then with a smile

said that"happy" was my goal

"There might be hope for mankind yet

and for your immortal soul"

We might just ask too much of each

newly born generation

 Expecting them to build upon

the previous foundation

 

It's pride that tweaks our vanity

in damned pride our soul believes

Why is it only through this pain

that by love, our soul relieves

  I'll have that old woman to thank

when I swim the great expanse

There I'll make for the distant bank

where fate may grant me that chance

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Author's Note

The weight we place upon the shoulders of our children is also a heavy burden we carry upon our own souls. Knowing they will try to reach those expectations, whose fault is it really but ours if they cannot? We give them the gift of life. Then try to lead by example. However we can only hope we have done well by them and headed them in the right direction. Let happiness be your guide!

Reviews

[zainul]

I dedicate my reverence to Tate Morgan who presented this masterpiece for the community of humans engaging their talent and time in WritersCafe.
This poem has envisaged a popular discussion which has already earned about 80 reviews ans 800 views.
I feel proud that Tate has become in his right a great preacher for the good of family,children,tradition and heritage.
Reading all the amazing reviews,I am convinced to say that the world still belongs to pure human beings,not to the fictional characters like vampires,wolves,ghosts and aliens.
Family bondage,love among parents and children,social norms and values and responsibility of parents to their children and vice versa still make the world moving like an entity.
Tate created this poem instilling all good characters of good poem with rhymes which he specifically mentioned in his note.This is a lesson for all of us who choose perfection.
He tried to add other elements to amuse his readers too.The portrait of a happy child in a field of cereal makes me so happy that I feel myself in the paradise.
The addition of wonderful music video to entertain the readers reflects his taste of classical heart.
I agree with all reviewers what have been noted here for the benefit of our children.I strongly feel
that this poem along with its precious reviews is a great symbol of benevolent poetry.

[Tate Morgan]

What could I say to that fine review that wasn't felt in the reading of it? Truly a genuine and benevolent gift .I I feel honored and humbly thank you
Tate

[zainul]

I feel honored that you have accepted this humble review.
Thank you very much.

[Stacey Watts]

Sometimes in life we see can see the importance of things through our children. Your words are very wise and astute. I enjoy reading your words.

[Michael X]

beautifully written sentiment and capture of a memory that imparts a sense of wonder
and wisdom, a light guiding what matters most, an unconditional outlook, brilliant work :)

[Marie]

And our parents' expectations for us were just that high. Did we meet them? In the end, as you say, happiness is the goal to meet. If we can achieve it and give it to our children, "there might be hope for mankind yet".
Thank you for reminding us...

[David Lewis Paget]

I never placed the weight of my own ambitions or expectations on the shoulders of my children. When asked, I always said it will be enough if they're happy and content. We really can't ask any more of them, and we must trust them to find their own way through the pitfalls they'll face. It's all part of becoming a well rounded human being. To date, they're all doing well. A nice thought, Tate.

[BrynnaW.]

This was absolutely beautiful! Such a magnificent write. Parents do tend to push their kids too much but, in the end, what they care about most is their kid being happy. (I should know, I'm still technically a kid.) Happiness is valued very much in a family relationship. A deep poem with a true reality. It was a wonderful read, you never disappoint with your poems. An excellent job and keep on writing! :)

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

Tate, I love this on every level!


I thought a while then with a smile

said "happy" was my goal

"There might be hope for mankind yet

and your immortal soul"


So much is said in this.
We hope our gained wisdom is grasped by our children with both hands.
Still understanding they must find their own wisdom as their own fate demands.
Happiness, a wished goal so grand,
for it can be captured throughout the journey of a boy becoming a man.
Well done Tate, as always.

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Oh Tate, this is so beautiful! What a heart you have to write such touching words as these :)

[Tate Morgan]

Very kind of you to say so thank You! We all want the same things.I hope those who need find the love in this life that leads to the next. Who among us doesn't need love? A child equates our love for them by their successes and failures. It is important that we share with them the struggles. And once in a while the failures we ourselves have for comparison.

[...]

I did read it Tate. It was beautiful