My Immortal Soul

I watch my son embark on life

and I wish him all the best

His way will be no easier

than it's been for all the rest

 

The first child's life is the hardest

as they blaze their new found trails

Upon their shoulders rides the weight

of siblings, hopes and travails

 

An old woman once asked of me

as she touched upon my fears

"What do you want your son to be

when he reaches adult years"

 

I thought a while then with a smile

said that"happy" was my goal

"There might be hope for mankind yet

and for your immortal soul"

We might just ask too much of each

newly born generation

 Expecting them to build upon

the previous foundation

 

It's pride that tweaks our vanity

in damned pride our soul believes

Why is it only through this pain

that by love, our soul relieves

  I'll have that old woman to thank

when I swim the great expanse

There I'll make for the distant bank

where fate may grant me that chance

Author's Note

The weight we place upon the shoulders of our children is also a heavy burden we carry upon our own souls. Knowing they will try to reach those expectations, whose fault is it really but ours if they cannot? We give them the gift of life. Then try to lead by example. However we can only hope we have done well by them and headed them in the right direction. Let happiness be your guide!

Reviews

[zainul]

I dedicate my reverence to Tate Morgan who presented this masterpiece for the community of humans engaging their talent and time in WritersCafe.
This poem has envisaged a popular discussion which has already earned about 80 reviews ans 800 views.
I feel proud that Tate has become in his right a great preacher for the good of family,children,tradition and heritage.
Reading all the amazing reviews,I am convinced to say that the world still belongs to pure human beings,not to the fictional characters like vampires,wolves,ghosts and aliens.
Family bondage,love among parents and children,social norms and values and responsibility of parents to their children and vice versa still make the world moving like an entity.
Tate created this poem instilling all good characters of good poem with rhymes which he specifically mentioned in his note.This is a lesson for all of us who choose perfection.
He tried to add other elements to amuse his readers too.The portrait of a happy child in a field of cereal makes me so happy that I feel myself in the paradise.
The addition of wonderful music video to entertain the readers reflects his taste of classical heart.
I agree with all reviewers what have been noted here for the benefit of our children.I strongly feel
that this poem along with its precious reviews is a great symbol of benevolent poetry.

[Tate Morgan]

What could I say to that fine review that wasn't felt in the reading of it? Truly a genuine and benevolent gift .I I feel honored and humbly thank you
Tate

[zainul]

I feel honored that you have accepted this humble review.
Thank you very much.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

You are a talent that is relished

[Tate Morgan]

thank you

[lei]

we, children needs someone to look up to as our role model.. someone who will lead the right path and someone we can call our hero....

[Bryan Micheni]

the pressure is ridiculous. i'd know, i'm under it. true piece

[emmajoy]

Children deserve a fire to warm them, a path to walk upon, and the freedom to be the unique individuals they're born to be. Other than those all important inherited genes, thev've a natural right to be guided but not led .. and i think part of your finely written words say just that.

[A.r. Bazian]

perhaps if the weight of being happy is upon your child's shoulders, maybe you can lend a hand... can you not?

[Tate Morgan]

i have missed you my old friend

[A.r. Bazian]

YOU'RE MISSED TOO! GOOD FRIEND! HOW DO YOU?

[Tate Morgan]

im fine time flows ever faster

[A.r. Bazian]

amazing! truly! inspiring!

[AK]

Wow! Such a nice and wise poem! The rhythm is great and it flows so very well:) the last stanza was amazing; writing of quality that would stick itself to my head for days. Keep writing!

[Cole Hayley]

Oh tate you never seize to amaze. another steller tour de force from you, but thats what I have come to expecet huh? Your a true inspiration on the site.

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

Simply happiness the eternal quest of every human! Thanks for taking us back to the essential!

[Tate Morgan]

You are welcome I find happiness is simple learn contentment with the necessities of life everything else then becomes a gift to enjoy

[Kes]

My own parents have always said they only want me to be happy, but that doesn't mean I don't feel the pressure to get a 'proper' job. I've always felt they'd be happier if I was behind a desk rather than playing music.
This is a wonderful piece of work; it's very emotive and has a touching subject.
Keep up the hard work!
K