My Immortal Soul

I watch my son embark on life

and I wish him all the best

His way will be no easier

than it's been for all the rest

 

The first child's life is the hardest

as they blaze their new found trails

Upon their shoulders rides the weight

of siblings, hopes and travails

 

An old woman once asked of me

as she touched upon my fears

"What do you want your son to be

when he reaches adult years"

 

I thought a while then with a smile

said that"happy" was my goal

"There might be hope for mankind yet

and for your immortal soul"

We might just ask too much of each

newly born generation

 Expecting them to build upon

the previous foundation

 

It's pride that tweaks our vanity

in damned pride our soul believes

Why is it only through this pain

that by love, our soul relieves

  I'll have that old woman to thank

when I swim the great expanse

There I'll make for the distant bank

where fate may grant me that chance

Author's Note

The weight we place upon the shoulders of our children is also a heavy burden we carry upon our own souls. Knowing they will try to reach those expectations, whose fault is it really but ours if they cannot? We give them the gift of life. Then try to lead by example. However we can only hope we have done well by them and headed them in the right direction. Let happiness be your guide!

Reviews

[zainul]

I dedicate my reverence to Tate Morgan who presented this masterpiece for the community of humans engaging their talent and time in WritersCafe.
This poem has envisaged a popular discussion which has already earned about 80 reviews ans 800 views.
I feel proud that Tate has become in his right a great preacher for the good of family,children,tradition and heritage.
Reading all the amazing reviews,I am convinced to say that the world still belongs to pure human beings,not to the fictional characters like vampires,wolves,ghosts and aliens.
Family bondage,love among parents and children,social norms and values and responsibility of parents to their children and vice versa still make the world moving like an entity.
Tate created this poem instilling all good characters of good poem with rhymes which he specifically mentioned in his note.This is a lesson for all of us who choose perfection.
He tried to add other elements to amuse his readers too.The portrait of a happy child in a field of cereal makes me so happy that I feel myself in the paradise.
The addition of wonderful music video to entertain the readers reflects his taste of classical heart.
I agree with all reviewers what have been noted here for the benefit of our children.I strongly feel
that this poem along with its precious reviews is a great symbol of benevolent poetry.

[Tate Morgan]

What could I say to that fine review that wasn't felt in the reading of it? Truly a genuine and benevolent gift .I I feel honored and humbly thank you
Tate

[zainul]

I feel honored that you have accepted this humble review.
Thank you very much.

[Ama May Cooper]

Intrecate, your mind is truely one to wonder at.
Such honesty , and commitment in every line.
Brilliant flow.

[Andy Ruffett]

Not that I have children but I know that when each of us do, we try to pass all our good onto them. I'm sure your son will have a wonderful life.

[Seyi Ojenike]

This is a lovely poem

[*** Hey Jude***]

This is the poem that broke the dam, and the tears flowed as you read this precious write! Keep them coming Tate. You are on "fire"! Keep Shining ~ :-)

[brokenwing1986]

I think like poem alot, Amazing writing, I this speaks of turth in them.

[Valentine]

How true..I was from a family of nine kids and my oldeer brothers took a lot of the load off of dads shoulders when he still was living on the farm..Nice job on this one..love the picture..love and God bless..Kathie

[Mauricio Montoya]

Were all given task in life we must complete sometimes it can be a tough because we hope for the best in cur children, you've captured all of what is part of being a family in the end we grow together.
Excellent write.

[Tate Morgan]

Thanks mauricio

[Eric Richard]

Very powerful and great message. I liked that the narrator just wanted their son to be happy instead of putting pressure on them to be the greatest whatever it may be.

[Tate Morgan]

thank you

[Eve]

No greater beauty that a poem dedicated to ones Child, children are pure wide opened innocence and they teach us how to see and love the world openly, we forget how to do that with wonder, this was a perfect write Tate, well done!

[Tate Morgan]

thank you

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Tate,

Yes, these are questions we all ask ourselves, i.e., do we ask too much, are we too self-serving and prideful in our expectations of our children. The true answer is found in the sixth stanza. We should be asking for happiness for our children! What else is there of value in life? We shouldn't fit them into our mold to make happiness for us. We should wish happiness for them.

Insightful as always, Tate. The poetic and true-hearted spirit shines through.

Very best regards,

Rick

[Tate Morgan]

thank you