My Immortal Soul

I watch my son embark on life

and I wish him all the best

His way will be no easier

than it's been for all the rest

 

The first child's life is the hardest

as they blaze their new found trails

Upon their shoulders rides the weight

of siblings, hopes and travails

 

An old woman once asked of me

as she touched upon my fears

"What do you want your son to be

when he reaches adult years"

 

I thought a while then with a smile

said that"happy" was my goal

"There might be hope for mankind yet

and for your immortal soul"

We might just ask too much of each

newly born generation

 Expecting them to build upon

the previous foundation

 

It's pride that tweaks our vanity

in damned pride our soul believes

Why is it only through this pain

that by love, our soul relieves

  I'll have that old woman to thank

when I swim the great expanse

There I'll make for the distant bank

where fate may grant me that chance

Author's Note

The weight we place upon the shoulders of our children is also a heavy burden we carry upon our own souls. Knowing they will try to reach those expectations, whose fault is it really but ours if they cannot? We give them the gift of life. Then try to lead by example. However we can only hope we have done well by them and headed them in the right direction. Let happiness be your guide!

Reviews

[zainul]

I dedicate my reverence to Tate Morgan who presented this masterpiece for the community of humans engaging their talent and time in WritersCafe.
This poem has envisaged a popular discussion which has already earned about 80 reviews ans 800 views.
I feel proud that Tate has become in his right a great preacher for the good of family,children,tradition and heritage.
Reading all the amazing reviews,I am convinced to say that the world still belongs to pure human beings,not to the fictional characters like vampires,wolves,ghosts and aliens.
Family bondage,love among parents and children,social norms and values and responsibility of parents to their children and vice versa still make the world moving like an entity.
Tate created this poem instilling all good characters of good poem with rhymes which he specifically mentioned in his note.This is a lesson for all of us who choose perfection.
He tried to add other elements to amuse his readers too.The portrait of a happy child in a field of cereal makes me so happy that I feel myself in the paradise.
The addition of wonderful music video to entertain the readers reflects his taste of classical heart.
I agree with all reviewers what have been noted here for the benefit of our children.I strongly feel
that this poem along with its precious reviews is a great symbol of benevolent poetry.

[Tate Morgan]

What could I say to that fine review that wasn't felt in the reading of it? Truly a genuine and benevolent gift .I I feel honored and humbly thank you
Tate

[zainul]

I feel honored that you have accepted this humble review.
Thank you very much.

[Kaylor Mason]

King Solomon asked the very same questions when he set out to find the meaning of life that he wanted to pass on to his son. In the end, all he came up with was "Love God, and obey His commandments." I suppose loving the Lord and loving and caring for each other is the best that any of us can do. (I know it's the best I can do, at least)

[Tate Morgan]

I dont much think about what it will be after death I worry about things that happen here more than anything else. Ill talk to god when the time comes and account for myself on earth till then

[JE Falcon]

I feel that the weight we place is not going to be a problem, in most cases. --- How the mind bends at the number of terminal distractions there are in the teenage world of today. In my day it was alcohol and tobacco, but today there are far worse poisons, and in such variety that it boggles the mind. And the really sad part is that they are socially acceptable. --- As usual, Mr. Morgan, you have given us points to ponder and did it with beauty. Thanks!

[Tate Morgan]

Awe thank you falcon I was lucky my kids have no vices

[Robert Trakofler]

wonderful piece Mr Morgan not a thing i don't like about this one! lovely lovely lovely lines

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you Robert. I appreciate that. I was on for a little bit today. I wrote this of my own son thinking he was going to move out soon. He has and is doing well. Thank you again for the kindness

[msharma]

Happiness is the greatest gift of God .Man knowingly and sometimes unknowingly passes on his experiences to his children .This sometimes mars the real growth of a child.
We as parents should be vigilant enough to give encouragement and try to let them feel and breathe the free air,that makes them truly human. Beautifully written .Outstanding as always.

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you I try to write about things that I know from experience

[Chris Shaw]

Happiness is the greatest gift you could wish for your children. That to me is far more important than what career they choose to do. Your lines are beautifully conveyed Tate and are full of wisdom. A great read.

Chris

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you. I originally began this write for a friend When I noticed it applied to all of us

[Chris Shaw]

It does apply to all of us. Sadly I have known some pushy parents who just want their kids to get to the top. They aren't that interested in the stress or difficulties that their child may suffer on the way, as long as they achieve.

[Tate Morgan]

my own parent as well fit that bill.However I never passed it along as the last generations had.I decided it is better to lead than to follow. When they are gone my son will not know what i have spared him

[Chris Shaw]

No, but he will know what YOU have done for him, and he will remember it and pass it down the line.

[Tate Morgan]

Im hoping that is the case. So far it seems to ring true

[Lorry]

You are absolutely correct Tate, I was the fourth of five kids and even a years difference to a kid can make that person a grown up to the younger ones, even if they are six and seven. I looked up to them so much that I have a permanent crick in my neck.
Add to that the worry of being the parent and im surprised our minds dont implode with all those silent thoughts and fears that scream. Watching them learn from their own mistakes, like we all did. Well, mostly :)
A wonderful piece that all the parents out there will be nodding in agreement to.

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you Lorry I had just such an upbringing

[Renée]

Nicely written Taters.. Faith, Living responsibly, Happiness and Love, with good spouse to share it all..nothing more that we can wish for..and as I write..good health..which is somewhat in their hands..

[Tate Morgan]

Thanks Renee I think on this poem every-time I consider my responsibility to Taters. In the end let it be said I tried my bet to simply be kind and considerate of his own talents and happiness.

[Renée]

It's what we do ( :

[Rtrt]

Thank You! With time, I'll come back with a more appropriate review

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you Ihope this helps in some way

[B]

Love it

Happiness that is beautiful
I want my boys happy doing whatever they wish to do
Loving everyone
And having everyone love them
Happy

I agree
Beautiful

[Tate Morgan]

It is the only way it truly is

[Einstein Noodle]

happy and fulfilled .. true to self .. your poem represents all the best of sentiments parents can hold for their children .. so sad that those very high ideals most times will deny one much in monetary gain .. but then it is suffering and sacrifice that triples our creativity ;) wonderfully said Tate .. once again.. wonderfully said!
E.

[Tate Morgan]

Thank you I hope this sentiment is enough to sustain my child through life

[Einstein Noodle]

i believe the Good Book says something like man does not live by bread alone ;) i have a sneaking suspicion that with such a solid background from you they will do just fine .. whenever i have opined about not having more money i think of (yes again from the Bible) something from one of the old testament prophets who said in prayer .. dear Lord do not make me so rich i forget i need you nor so poor i am tempted to steal :)
E.

[Tate Morgan]

I believe having enough so that life is always a challenge but still rewarding keeps us strong inside still pushing us to succeed