Madness

Positive, so right, very, very right I am; watching me he is, wrong I am not.

 Why, why oh why oh why was he staring?

 Paranoid, he said I was; annoyed I am.

 My breathing, it slowed, slowed almost to a stop. 

He said it's a mental illness, that the things I see, the things I hear. 

OH! 

The things I hear, I hear so well, but but to dwell on them I do not, remember, repeat, delete. 

Delete from my mind but only for a moment. He said they’re not real, that they are only in my head. 

Mad, I called him! Mad, he called me, mad, mad, mad. 

All in my head? I see them, 

there! 

Reaching for my hand! 

Lead me to heaven I said, take me to hell they did.

Author's Note

thanks for reading

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Not bad. Had a little Yoda feel to start. Nice description of, well, could be a lot of things... depends on how you look at mental illness. Bipolar mood stuff is my choice today.

Reminds me of a comedian, I forget his name, "...not only are the voices in your head real, they're accurate as well."

Well done.

[Inject Positivity]

Beautifully crafted work, well thought out and very well presented....The concept was very good too.....Loved it mate....Full ratings.....

[Aries]

thank you so much for your kind words

[Inject Positivity]

Always welcome mate.....

[Willard Wells]

Very inward look in finding the line between fact and fiction. Reality and fantasy. I hope all will find their path which can be hidden behind the clouds a mind creates. Well done piece.

[Aries]

Thank you so much its means a lot to me honestly

[Tsubaki Kuro]

I love it. It is very trippy, but well done.

[Aries]

Thank you so much, I did it for an english assignment. It had to be the same writing style as Edgar Allan Poe. :)

[Tsubaki Kuro]

Nice. I look up to Edgar Allan Poe for my writing style. Most of my writings have psychological properties.

[wordman]

certainly a tongue twister,enjoyed the read

[Aries]

thank you, i am glad.

[Aries]

you are the very first person to ever give feedback/comment :) its exciting

[wordman]

some people on here is shy,lol