Love Poem

On the Sixth day, God created Man

But we were not as we are today.

We each had four arms, four legs, and two heads.

We were each either male-male, male-female, or female-female,

But we were powerful, and we foolishly sought to overthrow our Creator.

God saw our preparation for attack,

Out of defense God cut each of us in half.

And we, beside ourselves with total anguish

From our new-found inherent incompleteness

Yearning for wholeness

Began to join with one another in sexual union,

Attempting to regain what God had taken from us.

We began to disregard other feelings such as

Hunger

Thirst

Fatigue

Until we began to die from self-neglect.

God took mercy upon us and we no longer neglected our other needs.

But the scourge that once almost killed us all now infects me.

That is why I write this letter.

I see in you something that makes me feel whole once more.

And though I know about this feeling that almost killed us all

I cannot ignore it

I see the warning that history brings me

Danger

Suffering

Foolishness

but I will to act regardless.

Such is life; and such is love.

Author's Note

Do you think that the poem works? Do you think the feelings are right. Do you think the structure my be changed in some beneficial way? Any comments or advice is strongly welcomed.

Reviews

[junaid altaf]

i would like to say that as the basic theme is love so the poem would have much influenced if the concept of the creation would be formulated on the grounds of love! its my perception.