Crush

Crush

A Poem by Chirag Kumar

Her talks are intriguing but lips are fine
She radiates, splintering into an essence of divine.
Time stops ticking when I wander in her eyes
Nobles away from such addiction are often the wise.
Subtle smiles scare me with infatuation sublime.
Her mystic shyness shatters my romantic paradigm.
I steer, only to witness myself drowned,
into the arms of the universe, once left disowned.

- C Kumar 

© 2016 Chirag Kumar


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Very good; sublime vocabulary. There are just a few thing's I'd like to mention:
"of divine" doesn't make sense by itself; you could say "so divine" so it reads "an essence so divine"
And I would swap "infatuation sublime" to read "sublime infatuation".
Lastly, the first line and 4th line could possibly do with some with some rewording...


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Chirag Kumar
Chirag Kumar

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