Pain

PAIN:

Today, we're scared at the sight of pain.

A throbbing pain blurted out by our body,

or moments of scathing pain,

inflicted upon us,

by the external world.

We love to be at ease,

thrive in the shores of comfort,

and expect all the riches in the world

to chase us,

in the name of our namesake strides.

The rest of the world is engrossed,

in the quest of meeting deadlines,

exerting themselves into strange avenues,

trying to discover new paths,

but,

in the dark.

Some roads lead to success,

some don't.

Yet, anxiety lives on,

irrespective of the eventuality.

Then why to fall in pain,

when success ain't a guarantee?

Then there are some wise men,

who remind us of the other wise men,

especially the reminiscences of Christ,

who bore the gift of pain

at the expense of our good,

or even the legends of Rama,

who sacrificed his riches,

drunk bouts of pain,

to savor the liquor of victory.

But, those were enlightened beings,

monumental personalities who are worshiped,

by millions till today.

And our deeds stand out to be peanuts,

when compared to the magnitude of their karma.

So why make a mockery of ourselves

and garner pain?

Let all be happy,

let all be lazy,

for we are dead sure,

of attaining ways to GAIN,

without PAIN.

- C Kumar

21st August 2015

Author's Note

I have written this piece from the point of view of a lazy person. Feel free to comment on the poem :)

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

I read this poem twice out loud and recorded it both times. Once, the way that it is written here and the second time, the way the that it should have been written here, with proper punctuation. What a difference punctuation makes to the ears of the listener and the quality of your poem.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks Raj for your feedback. I have made the changes. If more changes are required, do leave a comment :)

[Perkele.7885]

For some reason you refuse to use a comma after the word but, (this is a slight break in the speaker's cadence0

[B]

I think this is a very smart write
Yes if we are wise
we will learn that pain for someone else
well it is beautiful
We should not fret at tough moments of life
they served someone
which is a pretty great thing

i love this

[Mitali Shah]

Awsome. No gains without pains :) keep going

[butterfly desire]

I don't see lazy. so much as I
see fear ,fear of failure fear of pain
I really like your abilty to put your self into another persons
state of mind . good job

[SleeplessVolcano]

oh yes, sloth has a way of inspiring the lazy to devise wonderful shortcuts, when hard work is the only way!

Delightful writing!

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your review :)

[andrew mitchell]

I want to be happy not exactly lazy but enjoying my fav pastimes or hobbies and being paid while doing it would be nice lol

[Willard Wells]

Lazy and happy. I can do this. Thanks for the work, very nice.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your review Willard :)

[wordman]

well you have hit the nail on the head,i work every day i have stuff to do and i live in pain

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks Wordman for your review :)