Wandering birds

Wandering birds

A Story by Chirag Kumar

Wandering birds
desperate
lurking for shelter
from the dark clouds
about to cry,
but, who can
contending with
exist where
there are no trees.

© 2016 Chirag Kumar


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Strikingly dark!
The imagery is vivid and beautiful in its own way.
Enjoyed reading it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chirag Kumar

8 Years Ago

I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks :)
Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.
my suggestions
desperately
looking
but, who can
contending with
exist,where there are no trees
no period after cry


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this a lot, really good!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Nicely done, yes we are cutting too many trees done on this Earth. I very thoughtful piece to remind us of this tragedy.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely hidden social message to humans to plant more trees for everyone's survival. Keep it up.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Even birds need safety and security from mother nature... to not have trees must be like a dark bird nightmare! Awesome words... well written my friend :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well written!
The freedom of our winged friends is the freedom I would guess
everyone desires:) Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"with the breeze
For here they exist, but not trees"

They have wings to fly. They are free to roam and glide the spaces. An excellent take on that...:)...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes I see the birds darting about in an effort to avoid a heavy downpour. No trees and the ground just running red and brown as the water flood over the ground as they continue to search. Ok I drank too much coffee. Thanks. Apparently I liked it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Very nicely done
Birds are born for complete freedom
no time to rest or be restrained

Gorgeously clever

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 17, 2015
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Chirag Kumar
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