Wandering birds
A Story by
Chirag Kumar
Wandering birds
desperate
lurking for shelter
from the dark clouds
about to cry,
but, who can
contending with
exist where
there are no trees.
© 2016 Chirag Kumar
Reviews
Strikingly dark!
The imagery is vivid and beautiful in its own way.
Enjoyed reading it.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks :)
8 Years Ago
You are welcome.
my suggestions
desperately
looking
but, who can
contending with
exist,where there are no trees
no period after cry
Posted 9 Years Ago
my suggestions
desperately
looking
but, who can
contending with
exist,where there are no trees
no period after cry
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I like this a lot, really good!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
I like this a lot, really good!!
Nicely done, yes we are cutting too many trees done on this Earth. I very thoughtful piece to remind us of this tragedy.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Nicely done, yes we are cutting too many trees done on this Earth. I very thoughtful piece to remind us of this tragedy.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Lovely hidden social message to humans to plant more trees for everyone's survival. Keep it up.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Lovely hidden social message to humans to plant more trees for everyone's survival. Keep it up.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Even birds need safety and security from mother nature... to not have trees must be like a dark bird nightmare! Awesome words... well written my friend :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
Even birds need safety and security from mother nature... to not have trees must be like a dark bird nightmare! Awesome words... well written my friend :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Well written!
The freedom of our winged friends is the freedom I would guess
everyone desires:) Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!
Posted 9 Years Ago
Well written!
The freedom of our winged friends is the freedom I would guess
everyone desires:) Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
"with the breeze
For here they exist, but not trees"
They have wings to fly. They are free to roam and glide the spaces. An excellent take on that...:)...
Posted 9 Years Ago
"with the breeze
For here they exist, but not trees"
They have wings to fly. They are free to roam and glide the spaces. An excellent take on that...:)...
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Yes I see the birds darting about in an effort to avoid a heavy downpour. No trees and the ground just running red and brown as the water flood over the ground as they continue to search. Ok I drank too much coffee. Thanks. Apparently I liked it.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Yes I see the birds darting about in an effort to avoid a heavy downpour. No trees and the ground just running red and brown as the water flood over the ground as they continue to search. Ok I drank too much coffee. Thanks. Apparently I liked it.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Very nicely done
Birds are born for complete freedom
no time to rest or be restrained
Gorgeously clever
Posted 9 Years Ago
Very nicely done
Birds are born for complete freedom
no time to rest or be restrained
Gorgeously clever
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on June 17, 2015
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