Charles

He lusts for your moans 

He relishes your screams

 Sucking your lips and biting them is a forever dream. 

But Charles isn't for a rush 

He is in for a game 

A game of seduction which would put lovers to shame. 

 And so the game begins 

 with intense rides of pain. 

His subtle moves 

his unfamiliar grooves 

surprise you 

agonize you 

terrorize you 

as he tears into your body

 with a sharp deadly dagger

 drawing a picture of wounds and 

unleashing a fury of blood on your canvas. 

An orgasmic experience 

as he strangles you with passion

 and watches you wither away 

slowly 

steadily

 fanatically

 with elation. 

Your tears are his worthy treasure 

Your struggles peak his cravings,

 and as you pass away, 

he stands up as victorious, 

bereft of any conscience 

and portraying a face of ambience 

to the world.

 He exits your home 

and enters the city to roam 

and find another chick 

to be seduced by him 

and make her fall asleep, 

Deep Deep Sleep. 

 - C Kumar 

22nd May 2015

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

A fantastic write but as you know only one winner and that is me . lol I'm joking a lovely write and I hope you do well!

[Michy J. Sterling]

This didn't scare me but it definitely elated that dark part of my brain.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your kind review Michy

[alf]

Woew!!! dark!! hi Chirag. A very good write!! I was drawn in and morbidly fascinated!! alf

[Mitali Shah]

Awesome description of an desperate man to fulfill his urge and not leave back any evidence and not grant life to the victim.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your review didi :)

[Mitali Shah]

:) your welcome

[Gurleen Saluja]

Well portrayed the character sir, with wordings so good. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your review Gurleen :)

[Saddam]

Its wonderful. Every details is fantastic.
You write it well friend.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for the review Saddam :)

[valerie7412]

Did he kill the woman? I hope not because otherwise that may have been good love making! It's sad if he did kill her because if he liked it so much he could have kept doing it to her forever. He could be a Dominant or something with willing submissives, and would not have to be a murderer! So sad.

I liked the writing especially in some wording like orgasmic, lusts for your moans, relishes your screams, and how it agonizes and surprises the. That turned me on. Tears and struggles that peak his cravings are great too. Then in my opinion it gets less erotic when she dies if she did because I liked the whole experience up to that point.

[Chirag Kumar]

I have put a perspective of a psychopath who seduces girls and then kills them. So Charles isnt normal.! :D Thanks for your feedback Valerie :)

[valerie7412]

You are very welcome, it was part pleasure, part ahhh no!

[AaronFreitas]

A very passionate write my friend! I really enjoyed it :) Definitely great creativity :)

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your review brother :)

[Perkele.7885]

Charles, so well done for your topic! Excellent! But, a bit ghoulish for my normal reading material.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your review Raj :)

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
Definitely darkness involved here but the piece it self
has great imagery and well worded:) Thanks for sharing
and

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your review Jamestown :)