Two Springs

Two Springs

 

At a time

Immemorial

It was

Ordained

That

Two springs

Would

Surge forth

From

The substratum

Of

The Earth

In perpetuity

 

The waters

Of

One spring

From

A pristine,

Mountain,

Inception

Sparkled

In

The afternoon

Sun

With crystalline

Lure

Creating

The purest

Of brooks

Nourishing

Mother Nature

And

Sustaining

Mankind

 

The second

Spring

Polluted

And corrupt

Reeked

Of noxious,

Sulfurous

Vapors

And emanated

From

The fiery

Volcanic

Abyss

Of Hell

Itself

Its tainted

Waters

Poisoned

Mankind

With

Death,

Disease,

And destitution

 

It could be

No

Other

Way

For Allah Himself

Was

Bound

By the

Spirit

Of divine

Justice

To allow

His

Creations

Their

Freedom of choice

Between

Good

And evil

 

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

Gabe...
fantastic imagery ...the form meandered in an almost stream-like manner
This runs to (some extent) paralell with the book of Genesis.

Am curious as to ...whether this was inspired by scriptures ...or poetically retelling?

The picture just adds even more to this

great piece
Blessssssssssssssss

[TL Boehm]

incredible - we are allowed free will - often to our detriment....and yet the tendency is to blame the Father when we ourselves invited the monsters in....held the door open for them.
Eloquent writing. Beautifully and powerfully stated

[Emily B]

Gabe, I think the beauty is in the telling. The calm, cool voice which resembles the waters of the first spring to me meanders through my mind. We all say we choose the first spring. But do we really?

[R J Askew]

This I like. I am not a great one for spiritual themes, but I do like the choice of good and evil which is a valid subject even for a person who does not belive in god. I liked the execution also. I found the poem read fluidly, mirroring the theme. And I enjoyed the contrast between the sonnet which shows you are comfortable with different methods. I liek the notion of a spring. And the sulphrous spring, to this reader at least, represents materialism and climate degeneration as much as moral evil, though I imagine you might say material greed is a by-product of a failed spirituality. Enjoyed the read and thinking about it.

[E. M. Murren]

Fabulous write! Choice is always ours to take. I love the imagery of water. So spiritual. Bravo.

[Marsha]

This is a Wonderful write and expressed Beautifully!

Marsha

[Raef C. Boylan]

Hmmm...we choose which to drink from?

I like the distanced, soothing tone of this; good imagery and simple structure help keep your point clear in a poetic way.

Is this taken from some actual holy scriptures, or is the 'two springs' your own metaphor?
Sorry, religiously quite ignorant.

Good write.
Thanks for posting it.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Good vs. Evil .. as always .. this is a lovely poem with wonderful imagery and the message is one we need to hear.

Chloe
xoxo

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

Great imagery! I like the choice between good and evil... Great write! Oh... i love the picture!

[Brenda Sue]

I love the imagery. Wonderfully penned. Great job.