Two Springs

Two Springs

 

At a time

Immemorial

It was

Ordained

That

Two springs

Would

Surge forth

From

The substratum

Of

The Earth

In perpetuity

 

The waters

Of

One spring

From

A pristine,

Mountain,

Inception

Sparkled

In

The afternoon

Sun

With crystalline

Lure

Creating

The purest

Of brooks

Nourishing

Mother Nature

And

Sustaining

Mankind

 

The second

Spring

Polluted

And corrupt

Reeked

Of noxious,

Sulfurous

Vapors

And emanated

From

The fiery

Volcanic

Abyss

Of Hell

Itself

Its tainted

Waters

Poisoned

Mankind

With

Death,

Disease,

And destitution

 

It could be

No

Other

Way

For Allah Himself

Was

Bound

By the

Spirit

Of divine

Justice

To allow

His

Creations

Their

Freedom of choice

Between

Good

And evil

 

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

Gabe...
fantastic imagery ...the form meandered in an almost stream-like manner
This runs to (some extent) paralell with the book of Genesis.

Am curious as to ...whether this was inspired by scriptures ...or poetically retelling?

The picture just adds even more to this

great piece
Blessssssssssssssss

[BrightEyes]

I love the imagery here - I can picture these two springs - so stark in their contrast of one another. Man standing between them - forever making the choice - which one should he drink from? excellent piece of work here -

laura

[Dezaraye]

This is an awesome piece. I really like the metaphor of the two springs. It's well done.

[Kat-Marie Berti]

Wow, very amazing imagery, you created a wonderful poem that I have fallen in love with!!! Your words flow like the springs themselves :) Very good write!

[Travis Lawrence]

Amazing. I love the way it flows like a waterfall as I read and scroll my eyes down the page. The way the verses contrast is well done, and how you leave a choice to the reader at the end. Wonderful work. The second verse is my favorite. I grew up in Austin, Texas, and it reminds me exactly of Barton Springs, if you have any idea what that is. It's on wikipedia haha. Anyway,

"Nourishing
Mother Nature
And
Sustaining
Mankind"

Amen to that.

Have a nice day!

[April Child]

Yes freewill, choice. There is so much fear about making wrong choices but I don't think bad choices necessarily make us evil or mean we are going to burn in hell for all eternity. I think it means we made a bad choice.

Nice poem. Flowed like the spring you were describing and the descriptions are spot on.

[BelieveInCelia]

Ah...choice...between Good and Evil.
That which defines our character...the choices we make in life...
Beautiful work...
Thank you,
Celia

[Joseph - Michael]

You're right about this one; We were born to make our own choices by the use with our the one and the only gift; Freewill

All I can say that it pretty strange how you set the writing up like that and I sort of having hard time reading it, yet I enjoyed it anyway, so it's all good here...

[Micheal Teal]

Well done my friend. Balanced and beautiful. Bliss is our birthright and freedom of choice is our destiny. My spirit weeps for those who know not freedom and my soul bleeds for those who not not choice. Words are a healing tool and we are blessed to have the freedom to read your words that we may share them with others that they may also taste freedom. I honour and respect what you have written. Bravo!

[Shadows of Sight]

I agree with Hampton below, that why not a stream, for streams are like dreams that flow from divine sources. And if you lay next to one, and be very patient, a trout may swim right into your hand.
I liked the contrast between good and evil. Your words slithered down the canvas like beautiful waters
sigh....
Good Write!

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Yes it is all about free will and choices this business of living, you have done justice to the wonderful world of metaphors and you have also done something beautiful for God...through creating awareness about the constant raging battle between good and evil...
Cheers,
Helen :-))))