Mayfly Ballad

A new hope has arisen in the galaxy for the Rebellion. The ultra-draconian Emporer shall not stand for much longer against the Jedi and their light side of the force!

Mayfly Ballad

 

Her aura glistens like a star

Her cheeks have dimpled lure

Such supple, shapely curves there are

The soul is choice and pure

 

With every tooth so perfectly

Aligned and shining bright

Each kiss a shard of Heaven be

Each word a dance of light

 

My heartache, woes, and strife have passed

Now love and friendship reign

The worst day that we shared surpassed

The unrelenting pain

 

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

ooooo...she is so Pretty.

This is beautiful in tone...content ...I respect a ballad ( i cant make them work)
and the font is perfect...
I must admit the description threw me oh so way off ?

I am touched by this line...

"The worst day that we shared surpassed
The unrelenting pain"

Gabe she will basically ...swoon ( do we still do that ? )

Blessssssssss

[Bubo]

A very beautiful tribute to a beautiful woman.............loved your lines .
Full of love and great hope...........very beautiful.

[thecoolone52]

ohhh that was pretty good i enjoyed it , but i enjoyed the picture more hahahaha good job!

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

See, I already reviewed it and didn't understand itls rythmic beauty. Now I see it!
Love All, Mejasha

[E. M. Murren]

This is a poem of hope and beauty. It flows gracefully and rhymes naturally. Well done.

[None]

Very loving and what woman wouldn't want to be described as beyond beautiful? This is gorgeous!

[ah]

great write, thanx for sharing, i loved the rhythm and rhymes, keep writing, keep sharing

[Phill Oz O'fee]

An Ephemeroptera tribute to a short and bitter/sweet romance. Very creatively structured and imaginative write. Worthy of any Jedi poet!

The power of the force is strong in this one!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Brenda Sue]

Beautifully written. To me it speaks of a future with hope, something we are all searching for. Great job.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Whoever she is she sounds breathtaking ...
I am not sure if this is an actual love poem for someone you know or
a bit of a put down for some of the Hollywood brats ..
Either or, nicely written..

Chloe
xoxo

[Fran Marie]

A very lovely flowing versed poem so beautifully expressed~and very Well Penned~Fran Marie