Tears

A mirror to one's heart.........

Like a shining star they fill my eyes

Doesn't matter if its sunset or rise

The moments of joys for me in the past

Comes over and over with them as a blast

They show me my true reflections

Whether it's guilt or affection

Tell me what's there in my heart 

Of course isn't it their foremost art?

Tried to hide them with a smile first

Still they come out as my heart burst

Making me believe what I've lost

They cross over scheming their cost.

Without leaving my eyes dry 

They comfort long telling me every-things a lie

Devising an unquenchable thirst

They ask me if I'm cursed?

Putting away all their doings

Cold and alone hanging in ruins

I ponder if it's true

My Love , is it really adieu?

Certainly it is , as I perceived

They came back as I grieved.

Aren't they just sweat from eyes

Then why it bothers so much when they arise.

Author's Note

Criticisms are heartily welcomed

Reviews

[dexterous sam]

there is no need of any criticism though ...the feelings are actually pouncing from your heart ...which are actually comes out in form of tears ...and actually it sometimes deceptive ...but actually tears always help you to barrage your emotions out ....pristine poem with lucid understanding but indeed complex to understand when it comes to conclusion...you are exceptional ...:))

[Archana]

Thanks Sam :)

[Jolan H]

What is there to criticize? Your poem is beautiful, not only that you cover all the ways tears come to us.

[Muskan]

Tried to hide them with a smile first
Still they come out as my heart burst
Making me believe what I've lost
They cross over scheming their cost.


Just loved it, its simplicity is it's beauty👍 keep the good work up

[siddhi]

it hit my goosebumps it is little bit nostaligic

[Archana]

Thanks Siddhi :)

[Chase]

Might i recommend adding more punctuation to better the flow? I love the versatility of language and word choice in this piece. Being a writer means a large vocabulary is a must! Another suggestion would be to eliminate your rhyming scheme. It feels very forced. Try staying away from rhyme until youve developed your writing style a little more. It'll save you a good deal of headache later on. Lovely piece overall. Keep at it :)

[Archana]

thanks.... will implement it

[the Game Master]

Felt the message of mixed emotions of happiness and sadness and you are not too sure what's in there in your heart. My only worry is that sometimes, there are lines that you have forced but other than that it was good!

[davescotland]

good piece of writing, I often wonder why we cry let alone how different the situations that make us cry are.

[Archana]

thanks Dave

[Terrence Chang]

Well penned Archana. Vivid words and wider imagination

[Archana]

Thanks Terrence :)

[Adam Adams]

A very deep and heartfelt poetry you pen'd up. True emotions of your soften heart're being dappled 'pon its pages, nicely. Kinda fascinating reading for sure!

However, there's a very minor typo in the line that am sure you've skipped to pay attention on: "Whether its guilt or affection"...

Use: "IT'S" not "ITS". The rest of the things're well written. Looking forward to reading your work!

[Archana]

Thanks!!!! And corrected the typo ;)