Thank you

An infatuation....which started a friendship and grew into an single-sided love. "A sorry seems to be a small word" and so THANK YOU - for coming into my life and being my friend.

I didn't realize, with those flashes of time,

You would become such a prime.

A person with a beautiful smile,

Will relive my heart , in such a friendly style.

And then we became friends

Which was just enough for the love to ascend.

We fought, we smiled, we cried,

But then he just became my pride.

Enchanting did my life became,

With his loving and caring frame.

Just like he wrote "I love you" on a book,

So had a dream for me , in his soft look.

With so much love and passion,

He intrigued me in ways I can't imagine.

With all the faith in me he surmised,

He dueled with people for my despise.

Just thinking of him makes me wonder,

He cast a spell and I went under.

Like a princess, whatever I desired 

He just acquired and never got tired.

It's just love for me, I admit,

All his feeling are simply legit.

Can a simple  "Thank You",  suffice,

For all he has done, will it match the price?

After all it was just his look and his smile

Which made me look alive.

Author's Note

A new poem....Hope you like it!!!!!

Reviews

[siddhi]

simple and sweet a cute but touching kind of peotry

[chinna swt]

My favourite one, although you could've used better vocabulary, but it's simple and sweet!

[Archana]

Thanks Chinna....... Ya you are right.......Its the very first poem I wrote after a long long time so my wordings are a bit off.........though I tried my best.....I hope you'll not find this shortcoming in my other works or any of my forthcoming works.

[Adam Adams]

I must say, you touched your loyal readers with the glimpse of your sweeten love shown in few poetically written poetic words. Excellent usage of words, proper functioning of verses and more importantly, .. liked the way you've smoothly streamed down your thoughts to very simplistic though thought provoking words. Very cunning you are! I like how you even tell the whole story in few words. Excellent!

[Archana]

Thanks..... it meant a lot

[Bear]

I try to tell every writer I come across that they should get someone to read their work out loud to them so they can hear their work. To often we get a mental image in our mind so strong that it overlooks simple things like typos. And sometimes something sounds good in your head but doesn't make since when you hear it out loud. And if you don't have anyone who can read to you there are some great text to speech programs you could use. Also with English not being your native language (which I always tell people they are brave for doing that, as English is the hardest language there is) you will want to take advantage of every writing tool you can. Here is a link to my lessons in poetry that has some helpful suggestions and links to writing tools http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/BearMage/1501893/
Your rhyme scheme is good and consistent, the emotional content is moving, some of your wording is a little off because of the language difference but not so much that your point is lost. So well done, oh you should identify yourself in the first line as the poem is in first person, (I didn't realize, with those flashes of time) and without the I it is an incomplete sentence :~)

[Archana]

Thanks a lot.. will work more on the language... and thanks for the link...it will sure be helpfull

[Archana]

Corrected the first line to give an idea of who i'm talking about ...thanks for the link...will remember the rules.....

[Bear]

I am glad it helped, good luck, good day, good writing and good poetry :~)