Returning

If all my poems were foods, this one would be a cupcake.

the evening was dressed in a deep August purple,
and the twilight air felt less like atmosphere
than a draught of a soft, vanilla smoke, that
slid over our skin till it dripped from our fingertips
with every last grace of a calm and velvet honey
returning to the earth.

and we'll never forget the mist,
or how it hung like a stained-glass window
of orange and silver and lime
while it bent the most stubborn needles of sunset
away from the precious tapestry of moonbeams
returning to the sky.

but it was the truth of the shadows,
as they rolled lazily from shingle to sidewalk,
that served to wash the moment clean of nostalgias
which might otherwise weary we fortunate few, who were,
though barely afloat on this stream of consciousness,
returning to the stars.

Reviews

[Theresa C Newbill]

I loved the journey, the trip, the ride through the cosmos, the search for beauty and truth as the underlying message seen in nature. And I specifically love that you were open to it all, with your arms wide, receiving the gift of natural occurrence, taking it inside your heart. Awesome.

[darkness*star1985]

i really like this, amazing writing the journy you took me on was reall great. very inspiring!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the dream like quality to the trail of silken descriptions is enthralling~ a literary appetizer~

[paul]

this poem has a flow like: velvet water

[M Baker]

Quite the other-worldly feel to this one. This piece would be worth reading even if it only contained the phrase "which might otherwise weary we fortunate few." What a beautiful fluidity.

[Kerry O'Connor]

Wow!!! What a reverberation of words and sounds... I found myself holding my breath through the second stanza, wondering if the piece could maintain its momentum until the end....
....we fortunate few, who were,
though barely afloat on this stream of consciousness,
returning to the stars.

Felt it!

[Emily B]

a co-worker brought in a frosted cupcake air freshener for our office, I've craved sweets for two days . . . I think I'll start coming to these words and salvage my diet from now on

they are beautiful words, and I call them sweet in the best possible way

[Lilly Negoi]

sweet :). three phrases painting a splendid image and molding words to fit the visual :). very nice!

[ju]

an atmospheric little snap-shot. packed with sensuality. the descriptions are very touchy-feely- and i've noticed b4, how you use light and colour so well.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

And a delicious cupcake it would be, excellent and the picture your words give us is outstanding. This is a favourite.