Completely F*****g Dead Inside

When I look myself in the mirror, I see nothing

When I open my mouth to speak, I hear nothing, nothing

 Completely dead inside

 

 When I quench my thirst and my hunger, I taste nothing

When I see my loved ones decay, then I feel nothing, nothing

 Completely dead inside

 

 

When I look myself in the mirror, I see nothing

When I open my mouth to speak, I hear nothing

When I quench my thirst and my hunger, I taste nothing

When I see my loved ones decay, then I feel nothing, nothing

 Completely f*****g dead inside

Reviews

[VertoAtrum]

I think to make this more varied, you could have found different words that portray the meaning of nothing, rather than just repeating it a bunch of times. It made it a little too repetitive, and lost the point it was trying to put across.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very succint, drives the point home wonderfully!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Point made. Not a word minced.

[arash.suicide]

tnx for that kiri:)

[Kiri Nells]

Beautifully done. It's strong and worded perfectly for the message you're trying to convey. Great write!