You Alone and I

A poem I wrote for my husband when we were dating.

You alone saw me break in half
And I let you watch
You alone heard me cry in the dark
And I never knew you were there
You alone sewed my wounds together
And I held my breath as I felt them heal
You alone kissed the scars of my past
And I wept knowing the future
You alone mended my soul from nothing
And I found my life
You alone sheltered me with your wings
And I had a place to hide
You alone made me smile when sorrow stole me
And I hated you for it
You alone knew when I was crying in the rain
And I let you wipe the tears from my face
You alone give me everything I desire
And I love you for it.

I Love You, Jesse.
Your Angel of Music,
XOXOXO,
~Casey~

Reviews

[Carl Drake Barnard]

When I saw this I was like wow!! :) Loved the shape of this poem ! This is such a lovely poem Aradia,the words and word flow and the rhythm of it all comes together spectacularly!! :) Really a great write! :)
Although you missing a photo :)

[Anita Singh]

Such conflicting emotions! Love, Hate, oblivion, concern, sorrow, happiness, breaking, mending, weeping, smiling, .. Everything at once. I loved it!

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Wow, if you were William Blake you could fashion these lines into the shape of a mask. Actually I bet you could do that anyway! It is almost there now. I wonder who the mask would be of. Not a tragic face, surely. For the first half you manager to hold much the same "storyline" but make it new and different each line and each repeated, "You alone," which is not easy! Well done! I like that you then move on to a different story, declaring your love an angel. It is unexpectedly self-effacing. There's that face again. If the face was split, then would each half show the same expression? Now when they are sewn back together, does one half hate while the other half loves?

[Aradia Lecrawe]

Very keen of you, sir. Blake is actually one of my favorite poets so I am flattered. I was going through a period where I realized my (at the time) boyfriend really meant to me. No one had ever gone so far as he did. I was very closed off from people and I let him in. He saw so many things that people couldn't fathom. He saved me from many things since. It was hard to let someone in and I did lash out a few times, but in the end, it worked out perfectly. Again, you have wonderful wonderful views on writing that few people have. I value that in people. Thank you so very much.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Thanks for saying so, about me being keen, and I do love Blake. I think these realizations -the REAL DEAL- are so important. They are the best time to write a good poem or any piece of writing really. You can feel the newness and the freshness. I am glad you let him in...It is action that brings us good fortunes in life. Finding the right one to let in is key, but just letting anyone in is a means to bringing more positives to your life. In the immediate sense a person may hurt you, but in the less immediate sense, only saying "no" to life is the greatest threat. Loving and losing is truly not as bad as closing one's self off. I think people get to choosy in life at times, instead of letting those around them be who they are capable of being in our lives. I have begun to try not to do that in my life. I don't mean to make this comment all about life and not about THIS particular piece of your art though, so let me just say I think that the hardest thing is seeing all the little moments in life that are worthy of being appreciated as moments. Might there not be a companion piece to this poem waiting in you which could tell of the moment you have thinking of how this ended perfectly? I think some of the greatest poems are about unexpected subjects. Celebrating things we didn't even know others shared in our experiencing. I want to encourage you to expand on your thoughts here by making the "flips side" poem, perhaps. Just a thought. I am very glad for the opportunity to review your work though! Thanks!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and beautiful poem for love. Real love is when we can be weak without fear of rejection. I like the places and thoughts described in the poem. Thank you for the amazing poem for the emotion of love.
Coyote

[Aradia Lecrawe]

Thank you for this review. It made me feel a lot better. :)