I Promise You Life

Please read and critique.

I promise you life.

What can be said
When nothing is new
Nothing is righteous
And nothing is true

Nothing is real
Except for the hole
That’s grows ever larger
In the depths of your soul

And is it so wrong
In a world never right
To escape to the stars
In a high lit night

So if you stay by my side
And pass me a light
I promise you virtue
I promise you life

Author's Note

Please give me honest and brutal feedback on how I can improve

Reviews

[Butterflymom]

I like your style, and I enjoy the raw honesty. Another well done piece.

[Inner Rain]

That is so much better now... Ill add it to my reading list... :D

[Inner Rain]

Its very nice... It can really make a person think...
A little tip: You might wanna break down the poems into sections/paragraphs to make it easier to read...

Nothing is whole
Except for the hole

You might wanna change this part, it sounds redundant...
But beside those 2 comments... Its a good poem... :D i like it... :P