The White Forest

Part One (story in a poem)

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From faraway,

He is staring at me…

 

Winter owl

Winter trees

Would you tell me who is he?

Of such cold, cold eyes

I have no memory.

 

And this thing I hold,

I wonder why I even have it

They say it is a sword

What for?

I don’t know.

 

Winter sky,

Is it supposed to be freezing?

Why do I feel nothing?

 

Oh white snow,

Why drink so much?

 

That red liquid,

What is that?

Author's Note

Reviews

[Suchita]

alright, well done, good work

[M. L. F.]

The following stanzas set a nice mood and tone for the rest of the piece.

From faraway,
He is staring at me…

Winter owl
Winter trees
Would you tell me who is he?
Of such cold, cold eyes
I have no memory.


Thank you for sharing.
..Misty

[Aprille]

Thank you so much Misty. :)

[ms. barrie]

fantastic write...I adore the stark melancholic mystique you brought
forth in this. reminds me of long ago tales...a person's journey
trying to find their way back home. this takes one away for a while.
Thank you for sharing

[Aprille]

Thank you so much. :)

[NinjaShadowWolf]

I miss winter so much. I use to live in a place where it snowed 8 months out of the year. Sadly, its sunny here... I love owls too. I just loved all this poem as a whole. Also love the song. Love the color contrast of white and red, red really stands out on white.

[NinjaShadowWolf]

Also, saw you like lettuce, so if you have any jokes about vegetables, lettuce know.

[Aprille]

I love owls too, since childhood I've been seeing a lot of them, but I've never seen a winter. Anyways, thank you so much for the visit and review. ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a walk in the white forest---blood shot owl, full of wisdom, but wistful...melancholy, drinking away problems...she hopes she can reach him somehow, understand his plight somehow. his tragedy.

[Aprille]

Thank you so much Sir for your wonderful review. :)

[B-poet]

Very catchy, like the inquisitive ending and tone along with your writing style from start to finish for this poem. Great work. :)

[Aprille]

Thank you so much. :)

[Blu Ski]

I really like the overall tone and mood of this short little poem.

[Steve L.]

Like the addition of "red" amongst the cold, "white" winter...

[Einstein Noodle]

interesting ... haunting with music that compliments ... such gentle suicide spilling blood on the quiet Winter .. love the owl ..love the trees .. i can see them so clearly .. and the bewilderment from loss of blood ... wow! kind of elegant in tragedy ..at least that is what i see ;)
E.

[Relic]

Wow, this makes the reader think for a bit doesn't it. Did he lose his mind to delirium while committing a crime or is it all a dream. The reader must decide. Nice writing.