Shattered

September 1, 2014 12: 30 am (Philippine time)

I

I’m made of wounds

And covered with scars

I’m of broken pieces

patched into place

Break me again and again

Breach my will

Crumple the stillness of my dreams

You've just awakened a heart of steel

Dauntless, vindictive, unforgiving...

Author's Note

This is just the part 1, hope you like it. :)

Reviews

[Neville]

I like this poem of yours too........All Good Things, N

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem.
"You've just awakened a heart of steel
Dauntless, vindictive, unforgiving..."
You led to the perfect ending. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Alex Boyd]

Wow this piece speaks volume especially the last part "You've just awakened a heart of steel Dauntless, vindictive, unforgiving..." Making me think in the past life this person was hurt and is now broken and has this unyielding wall built up to protect her fragile heart. I could be wrong but I also sense the un-name character was born through rape because of the beginning of the poem "I'm made of wounds and covered with scars." Or some type of sexual assault or maybe I'm thinking way too deep but anyway this is a very good piece of work.

[Aprille]

I never knew really how I wrote it, that's why it's taking too long for me to write the next part. I guess I let myself enter into another person's world. ;) Anyway, thank you so much for your wonderful review Sir. :) I really, really appreciate it.

[Steve L.]

Whoa!!! Dark and strong....has the same feel of some of my recent poems...great work!!

[Aprille]

I'm glad about it. Thank you. :)

[Salem]

I like this.

looking forward to next. well done

[Aprille]

Thank you. :)

[Chris]

Survivors feel that way...but are they really THAT way?

[Aprille]

I guess not. ;)

[NoelHC]

I look forward to the next part, this is well written, in the sparse style of one of my favorite poets Anna Ahkmatova. Well done.

[Aprille]

Oh, I'm a bit disappointed to myself for not knowing Anna Ahkmatova, that made me look for her at google.. Thank you, thank you so much. :)

[NoelHC]

I am pleased that I made you curious enough to look her up. An amazing writer, AA can say so much in very few words. Your poem made me think of her style.

[Aprille]

I've read some of her poems a while ago and all I can I say is, she's really great. Thank you again, so much. :)

[Kieta!]

Very descriptive and deep, emotional detail... great job!!! Very good poem!!!

[Aprille]

Thank you. :)

[Wandering Minstrel]

This thought provoking piece is really well told and the subject is very pertinent

[Aprille]

Thanks for the review. :)

[Eve Ola]

Deeply felt Olive, looking fwd to nxt. well done

[Aprille]

Thanks. ;)