I'll stay here and wait...

I’ll stay here and wait

‘til I’m as cold as ice

‘til my breath is dried by the chilling wind

‘til my tears are vanished beyond my eyes

‘til my heart is frozen, still in process of feeling again

‘til the moon shifted from west to east

‘til the Little Dipper is gone away

‘til my yearnings and bitterness are blown away

Here at the top of the roof, I’ll stay…

Close to the moon and skies and stars

Talking to God and the angels and saints

Even to my lost dog some years away…

I can smile when everyone is just listening,

Using the clouds and fogs as answers

I’m grateful to this top of the roof,

Here, I sit and no one bothers

In the world of my kind,

It seems like many can hear

But only few are listening

They have feelings but lacking in understanding

So here, I’ll stay...

I’ll come back when my heart is whole again.

Author's Note

Floating words before I sleep...just inform me if there are errors or if you have some suggestions. Thank you.

Reviews

[J. K. Beach]

Hi Olive! This is a really nice little poem... it has a richness and a symmetry that is very appealing. The images that you paint are a bit sad and lonely, but very beautiful at the same time. Good work! There were two little confusing lines "tears are vanished" might want to be simply "vanish" ... "still in process to feel again" might want to be "still in the process of feeling again" Other than that it's pretty clear. Again, keep up the good work...

[Aprille]

I'm really glad to receive pretty constructive reviews from you. Thank you so much.

[Sami Khalil]

Your words vanish not when the whole is understanding but listens more when the whole is invading. An excellent write...:).

[Aprille]

Oh. :), thank you so much for the review. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...........................

[Tricia Pattinson]

Your words conveyed a sense of floating above the world. Your soul sandwiched between the Earth and the Heavenly bodies/aware and conscious souls. Enjoyed reading this emotional poem.

[Aprille]

Thank you. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. Good to have a place to hide and gather your thoughts.
"I’m grateful to this top of the roof,
Here, I sit and no one bothers"
I like the thoughts and the place in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aprille]

Thanks. :)))

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Matching Socks]

:) love is worth waiting for but don't wait forever! Just in case...

[Aprille]

Thanks. :)

[Jennie Baron]

Hi Olive, this is beautiful! I love the way you use images from nature to express a return to serenity.

I only see one tiny thing: The fourth line should be "‘til my tears have vanished beyond my eyes."

Otherwise don't change a single letter!

[Aprille]

Thank you so much. :)

[Frieda P]

A melancholy bedtime story Olive....an introspective look at being misunderstood.

are 'vanished'

[Aprille]

Thank you so much Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure, well done.