A Promise of Forever

This is a poem with back story but I am not yet writing it down...

This would have been a perfect night

with the stars and the green paradise…

But change is constant, nothing stays the same…

Rustling leaves are not always a lullaby

Soothing fragrance is not only the river’s scent

Wind doesn't always have the sweetest presents

 

There are nightmares here and there

Chasing you everywhere

I see you cry

Amidst the shadows,

You’re trying to fly

My knees are shaking, now my fear is shadowing

But thanks, I feel better when you whisper to my ear,

“Please stay, just don’t leave me behind”

 

Don’t you worry, I’m not letting you go

Close your eyes, hold my hand

Calm your heart

I’ll be alright, you’ll be safe tonight

You’ll witness the rays of the beautiful sunrise 

Who knows? ...

 somewhere there might be a rainbow in the middle of the rain

I can feel your stare, please don’t bother
I’m fine, I’m not hurt

Someday you’ll understand

I can see through your tears

I can hear what you want to say 

Don’t ever say goodbye

Just remember my words...

I’m just having a rest

I can feel peace on this mountain’s crest

Don’t be afraid

I’m fine, you’ll be alright

I will always be here, smiling...

You’ll be safe, life is forever

All that you know will always matter.

Author's Note

This was written on the night of February 11, 2014 while I was suffering from a high fever... just let me know if there are any errors... thank you.

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Most ideas have a sort of linear development as you and me an others would say they go somewhere even if they are not going anywhere as such. And I am taken for a ride here so I will invite you to walk with me.
"This would have been a perfect night" But change happened . So if that night would have stood still then it would ahve been perfect? Then change leads to nightmares and then to company that you say is good.Then this company becomes the idea and through her you feel and then there is a plea for better days to come. And a strong feeling of needing company some desolation and a little sadness too.

There will be better days to come

Thankyou for the invite

[Aprille]

You're welcome and thank you so much for the review.

[Alex Boyd]

I did enjoy this very much very heartfelt reading.

[Aprille]

I'm glad you enjoyed reading. Thanks. :)

[Nikki]

This is awesome! It's sad yet peaceful.. As if finally it has come but yet it can never truly pass as long as you don't let go.. Very good. :)

[Aprille]

Thank you Nikki. :)

[Nikki]

You're welcome ^_^

[Sophy Freebirds]

A very interesting piece of work... here you have mentioned ths golden rule of nature- the only thing constant in life is change itself.. we have a long list of would- haves and should- haves... but life is not always what we want.your words depict how the night slowly became gloomy leaving you alone in the darkness.You plea for some company but all you hear is your echoing cry.A touching piece.Hope you got well soon?? :)★takecare★

~Sophy

[Aprille]

Oh, so sweet ^_^.. Thank you so much Sophy.

[Sophy Freebirds]

:) it was a pleasure dear

[Kyle Sky]

Very interesting. This poem presented some nice ideas. Usual poems with thems of change would present change as a good and beautiful thing but this presented it in darker manner, yet this poem still added the reassurance of hope in the fourth and last stanza. The flow of ideas and how these ideas connect is very nice and the them is inspiring. This is one great literary piece.

[Aprille]

Thank so much. ;)

[Aprille]

*thank you

[Tricia Pattinson]

Its such a comforting poem, almost a lullaby with acceptance, reassurance, sadness, hope and a promise. Nice!

[Aprille]

Thank you so much for your kind review.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and tender poem for emotion and kindness.
"Don’t be afraid
I’m fine, you’ll be alright
I will always be here, smiling...
You’ll be safe, life is forever
All that you know will always matter"
The above lines we need to hear often in a long life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aprille]

Thank you. I really appreciate your reviews. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome and I enjoy your poetry.

[Aprille]

I'm glad you like my poem, I do appreciate. :)

[Dhaye]

This is beautiful and touching. I can fully relate to this. Actually, I am making a novella ( a book) with the same titl, so this one caught my attention.
Nice poem, Kabayan.

[Aprille]

I'm glad there is another Filipino here. Thanks for the review, I will surely read your book. ;)

[Dhaye]

There are many of us here, Kabayan. When did you join the site? Okay, I will send an invitation to the group so you can mingle to other Kabayans here. Welcome to the cafe. Happy reading and writing! If you have questions, I am glad to help. :)

[Aprille]

I'm new here,I just joined last July 9. Thanks for the invitation. :)

[Dhaye]

Sent you a message (PM).

[Frieda P]

An emotional roller coaster, change is a constant.

somewhere there might be a rainbow in the middle of the rain

There's always that hope to cling to...nicely pen'd.

[Aprille]

Thank you so much. :)

[Frieda P]

My pleasure olive. :)

[Emily]

I like your wording! Well done!

[Aprille]

Thanks Emily. :)

[Jack Wolfe]

Wind doesn't always have the sweetest presents (I think you meant presence, but I could be wrong.)

I feel better when you whisper to (in) my ear,

Change is inevitable and you portrayed that quite nicely, along with the desperation to 'hold on', even once its been torn away, well done, Olive.

[Aprille]

"presents" there means gift.. :) Anyway, thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. :)