Marriage

Marriage

A Poem by abby2011

why the woman takes it upon herself 
if she cannot incite passion
from her spouse

why the woman defends him
when he knows her no more

why she raises his offspring
and bears his burdens
and carries his load

she's all alone

so she;

puts little blue pills in his breakfast
and acts surprised at his excitement
and pretends that him ravishing her
is an authentic expression

swallows little white pills at dinner
to substantiate defence mechanisms

drinks legal poison which relaxes
unwinds
confines;
the truth that is her heart
he's tearing it apart

© 2011 abby2011


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this is the sad truth for many couples and i love how you describe a story through 2 very different (yet not so different) pills. they allow an escape from responsibility to their vows and ultimately to their own lives.

my only critique would be to consider shortening some of the lines and taking out words that are not necessary.

again, deep relationship-based work and you convey the dysfunction with an unflinching hand.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I have seen and heard this story too often , a wife who is made to feel insuperior and blamed for every fault in the relationship . again your raw honesty is in poetic concert with this theme ..

Posted 13 Years Ago


It's unfortunate that husbands and wives have forgotten their responsibilities, their rights and their duties... marriage is an institution... where men and women dwell in love and tranquility... good poem in essence

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's wow !

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ew

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is the sad truth for many couples and i love how you describe a story through 2 very different (yet not so different) pills. they allow an escape from responsibility to their vows and ultimately to their own lives.

my only critique would be to consider shortening some of the lines and taking out words that are not necessary.

again, deep relationship-based work and you convey the dysfunction with an unflinching hand.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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abby2011

Newcastle, Cooks Hill, Australia



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