i never understood why people hated you.

things are obstructing my vision, my eyes

things like window panes, trees, and wires

no wonder i can't see people for who they are,

you and i always had such a perfect memoir

but now that you're here

my eyes are straight clear

and the wind in my ears has died down,

things are done, temporarily, no longer ours,

gone for now, like the beautiful moon and the stars.

Reviews

[ice]

My suggestions:
The poems flow is pretty good.
My suggestions to improve it are:
Take out "electrical" in the second line,
Likewise "really" in the third.
Replace "me and you" with you and I...correct grammar.(fourth line)
A comma after "temporarily" (eighth line)
Also a comma after "now" (last line)
The commas will make your reader pause where you want them to.
Hope you don't think I am too critical.:-(
I liked the poem.:-)
Keep writing
ice