-Addiction-

Gluttonous ecstasy:
When attained is never free.
The gratifying, savory glee
is ever so analeptic--hopelessly.

Sugary bliss.
When injected is a sonorous kiss.
When absent, its affect you will miss.
Your need for allotment will convey your restlessness.

Hearty enjoyment.
Tenderly cooked in flames that are inadvertent.
When left too long you may burn it.
Careful, the aroma will draw you in without consent.

Enthralling carbonation.
Pupils dilate in adoration.
Lustfully sliding through your body with jubilation.
Filling inside you a cool gestation.

Such a fault of human kind.
Never leaving such guilty pleasures behind.
These horrible delectables will take over your mind.
It is the harmonious balance we must find.

Reviews

[ellen]

You can rhyme really well! I'm jealous! You have a great vocabulary and you can manipulate it well. However, it is not the most engaging piece. Consider making it more suspenseful and building to a peak in the poem.

[I Confess, I Digress]

The rhyme is very well done and thought out, but some of the line lengths cause a break in the flow of reading this poem, possibly due to forcing some rhyme placement. Perhaps the lines could be evened out metrically? Your word choice shows that you are very well-read; however, sometimes it is better (for sake of aforementioned flow of rhythm) to use more accessible words in place of larger (albeit more enjoyable) ones.

But enough about style. The statement made by this is potent and necessary. The last sentence on "harmonious balance" is insightful. The depth of this piece surely allows it to earn its place in the "philosophy" category. Unfortunately, hedonism is, in my opinion, one of humanity's greatest downfalls. Thank you for sharing this piece.

[Maggie]

Sounds good to me:D