Tell me

Really old poem I founddd.

Tell me that you love me & everything’s okay

Tell me that you’ll hold me & take my pain away

Tell me this is temporary & things will get better soon

Tell me that you think of me when you see the moon

Tell me that you’re mine from now until forever

I’ll tell you how you’re beautiful & I think you’re clever

Tell me that you’ll be here & not just end the pain

Tell me that our first kiss will be in the pouring rain

Tell me that we’ll run away & never look back

Tell me when we leave we’ll walk along the rail road tracks

Tell me that you love me and I mean a lot to you

Because I’ve been meaning to tell you

That I love you, too

Reviews

[Celtic]

OMG, what the......!!
hey, who're you girl, i think you're really a nice lyrical but don't you think more than me...lol
very nice writin' again, you know wht here in your this writin' i loved just two lines much that made my today, have a look
Tell me that you think of me when you see the moon...this's first lines that shows that how much one can love her...& shhows your love that how much your souls pure.

the second line's...
Tell me that our first kiss will be in the pouring rain...yea, this's an another line tht touched me from inner, here i saw only love...love...n love...what a nice view if it happens. I really can't imagine :)
but, hey, after read our your this writin' i'm thinkn' that why there's now fallin' rain...lol, but hey, don't you think that i awant that lovely view right now,...lol
i'd follow your words just n waitin' for that day when it's happen with me...lol

you know what you're a best writer n song maker, i need to rad your more stuffs to survive...lol
my ratin' for you is 97/100...

[deepblue04]

Cute poem

[de_maruf]

fine

[DivineButterfly85]

I like the fluidity of your poem with the use of repetition.

[Casper Dumass Lecroix]

Nice scheme dudet good poem

[Ees]

I enjoyed the pleading tone and the repetition in this poem. You shouldn't demand a first kiss in the rain, maybe a kiss in the rain, but a first one... that's putting a bit too much pressure on it. haha.
Anyway, this is great little poem. Nice work!

[James William Dyer]

I liked the demanding repetition of the phrase tell me. And the end line have the poem some extra dimensionality. Nice work

[Claire Twinn]

It sounds like a lot to ask if you haven't even had your first kiss yet! Perhaps it's about the things you hoped for and worried you wouldn't get- sometimes we just have to take the plunge and find out!

[Apatheia]

I meant my first kiss with them! :P I've had my first kiss already.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the desire and the purpose of the poem. We need to hear words of need and kindness. I like the repetition in the poem. Gave the poem strength. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote