These Are The Nights

These are the nights worth living for.

Rain is pouring

But it's raising my spirits high

The sound is luring

It's making my feet fly

Dancing in the twilight

My hair's a dripping mess

Everything feels alright

Washing away distress

I smile while the rain falls

Just because everything's silent,

Not even a bird call

Everything's peaceful, nothing's violent.

The pit, pat of rain is my only worry.

The reflection of street lights

Is distorted and all blurry

These are the nights.

These are the nights worth living for

A cheerful quiet hum

No idea what's in store

Or further in the night to come

But that doesn't matter

As long as you're as you are now

People hide and they scatter

You don't understand why or how

These are the nights worth living for.

Author's Note

I don't think I like this one too much, but tell me what you think?

Reviews

[Victorious]

Dear Apatheia,

The little things in life inspire much appreciation and that's what I received from this poem. I think it was pretty good.

You create the setting in the first stanza as you say, "Rain is pouring," and the sound being "luring" because indeed it is. I think of a shower when I read the next stanza. Yes, everything is silent because the animals scatter and hide away from the rain. Although I have to question, why is the pit pat of the rain a worry and not a relief? The diction in the fourth stanza is not the same as the rest. Why did you use the word "blurry" and "distorted?" The next stanza seems to pick back up on the admiration of the rain. I especially liked the line, "As long as you're as you are now," making me think of someone savoring the moment, the sensation, the feeling of that moment.

Interesting write. Thanks for sharing.

Sincerely Victorious

God bless

[Robert Lincoln]

Simple, articulate and honest. It's not trying to wrap things in a big theme, but clearly share the moment without getting melodramatic. I think it succeeds very nicely.

[James William Dyer]

I liked it. It painted a nice picture and displayed a very clear emotion. I felt this.

[frivolous treasures]

Simply lovely. I admit, I love rain... The rainy season here is absolutely wonderful!
Your poem has great potential, though the rhyme sounds a bit forced... But over all, very good! -^^-

[Bare Trees]

There's something about rain and poets. I too love a rainy night and I enjoyed this poem and the enthusiasm you put into it. Well done.

Pendragon

[Apatheia]

Thank you. :)

[Bare Trees]

:)

[eatmills]

No I liked it. The timing and structure are nicely done. The subject dear to my heart for I too; am a rain walker.

[Apatheia]

A rain walker.. I love that

[eatmills]

One of my favourite songs is Singing In The Rain.

[Ees]

Your title reminded me of high school for some reason. I guess because we liked to refer to the nights because we learned more there or at least as much as in class, but the content of the poem itself has a very different feeling. I really enjoy the first two stanzas! The words dance a bit like flickering light through a doorway.

"Is distorted and all blurry"- should start with "are"

Nice poem. I think th last several stanzas could possibly be worked on or one inserted in between adding a little detail, but overall you did a beautiful job!

[Ees]

Your title reminded me of high school for some reason. I guess because we liked to refer to the nights because we learned more there or at least as much as in class, but the content of the poem itself has a very different feeling. I really enjoy the first two stanzas! The words dance a bit like flickering light through a doorway.

"Is distorted and all blurry"- should start with "are"

Nice poem. I think th last several stanzas could possibly be worked on or one inserted in between adding a little detail, but overall you did a beautiful job!

[Claire Twinn]

I like this a lot, it's simple and honest. It's one of the few rhyming poems I have liked recently, but I agree with John, you shouldn't be a slave to the rhyme.

[Steven Cash]

it's not bad. like singing in the rain