Please, don't go.

Please don't go.

You're the only figure of a mother I have.

I know you've hit a low,

But be patient with my dad.

I've let you in.

You're the first since I was a little kid.

I've been hurt again.

Was it something I said or did?

What can I do?

There must be something I can say.

If only I knew.

But there you go out the door anyway.

I feel so helpless.

Please, please just.. don't go.

If only words could express-

How my love for you will always grow

Your kids are my siblings

And I need them like I do you.

Who am I kidding?

I love everything they do.

Their annoying yells,

Their suck up compliments.

The way they smell,

to their silly arguments. 

What will I do when you're gone?

An empty quiet room -

with just the TV on?

I can already feel the gloom.

Please, don't go. Please, just try.

I'm not strong enough to hear the last goodbye.

Reviews

[MachinaWriter]

You have a lot of things going on in your life. But you're strong, and I know in my heart that you'll make it through anything that comes your way. These types of things are never easy. Thank you for sharing this personal look into your life. It speaks of courage and is only one of the reasons why I know you'll make it. Again, I am an eternal fan.

[Apatheia]

Thank you so much

[Chris]

You've invested a lot of you in a parent's relationships. And I understand that. I know because I've invested that of myself in the past too. Hannah, we don't control what a parent does or how or whom they relate with. I wish I could tell you everything will be fine but you and your dad need to seriously talk out the stability, security, and interrelationship issues. And you AND he need to be honest and straightforward with each other. I wish you well.

Take care.

[Apatheia]

Thank you very much, that means a lot.

[Ees]

This is a well written poem. It flows. It is easy to understand. It is easy for the reader to put themselves into, in imagining that they may be loosing a parental figure.

But at the end, I just keep wondering if kids really feel that way about adults. If people really feel that way in real life. Though you were plenty descriptive and the poem is well written and I could put myself into it as in imagining people leaving me... I am not sure why, there is just something that is holding me back from full heartedly believing in the reality of this poem.

I don't say these things to be unkind. I say them because I think it is all of our duties to tell eachother on here whatever our impressions are. How else will any of us know what impression we are making on those that read our work? I hope that people who review my work will do so honestly too.

[Apatheia]

I mean, I really really feel this way. This is currently happening in my life like.. right now. My dads fiance just told me a few hours ago their breaking up and you can just tell that she's serious. She has 4 kids all under the age of 8 constantly being a bother but it just wouldn't be the same without them. She is honestly one of my best friends and it really is harder than just losing a parent figure because she's more than that to me. Thank you for telling me your honest opinion on it. It means a lot.

[Ees]

Okay. Maybe that's it then. Maybe it is too soon and if you write about it in a day or so when it sinks in more, it might sink into a page more too.
That sucks. It doesn't mean you can't still be her friend though. I am sure of it! There are phones. Your dad won't have to know.

re-reading it, I think that the second stanza was what put me off. I know that you are telling me that this is how you do feel currently, but for some reason the sentiments in that stanza just remind me of what adults always seemed to want to think that kids thought like, so that they could reassure them otherwise...

I am so glad you didn't take that to personally, because I really was hoping that it wouldn't come out that way, but sometimes it is hard to tell on the internet.

I think that you are a really great writer by the way. This is just one person's impressions of just one poem.

[Apatheia]

Thank you very much. And it's fine. ^^ I'm just glad you actually took the time to tell me your opinion of it. :)

[Steven Cash]

Wow, I'm really about to cry soon. First the other poem I read about a dad, now this about a mom

;_;

great job

[Apatheia]

Thanks

[Steven Cash]

np