Trying - Tried - Done

Tip-toeing in circles,

Right back to the beginning.

Messing things up again,

This is how we'll be ending.

I make many mistakes,

And I never learn my lesson.

I feel like I'm trapped.

My mind is a prison.

I'm spiraling, falling.

I am stuck here in hell.

Nothing's getting better.

My thoughts are never swell.

My dreams are of crimson,

My life is of coal.

Just getting to tin

Would be my life goal.

I'm trying to get better-

-I'm trying for you.

But at this rate it's going

You'll just have to make do.

Reviews

[Somebrownnerd]

Clever poetry, my favorite stanza would have to be:

I make many mistakes,
And I never learn my lesson.
I feel like I'm trapped.
My mind is a prison.

I reminds of that Einstein quote: "The definition of insanity is doing the same thing over and over again and expecting different results".

Great read, i really enjoyed it . Looking forward to reading more of your work.

[Apatheia]

Thank you very much. it also reminds me of that

[deepblue04]

I totally felt like this a couple times in my life, people have their ups and downs.. Good job!

[Apatheia]

Thank you. :)

[de_maruf]

i was attracted by name"Trying - Tried - Done"
but the written one is more than it
thanks for the nice one to make us read

[Apatheia]

Thank you so much.

[de_maruf]

you are welcome

[Rick White]

Jesus Christ. Very well written poem but can i offer you a cup of tea and a hug?

[Apatheia]

That sounds great. :)

[MachinaWriter]

I know this feeling. Trying to get better for someone else. It usually doesn't work. You have to do it for yourself, which is hard. Thanks for sharing this. As always, an avid fan ^^

[Apatheia]

Thank you very much