I'm done.

F**k it, I'm done.

You're a thing in the past.

I don't care, I'm gone.

I knew it wouldn't last.

 

Trust me, I'm numb -

- from your "loving" and "caring".

You're returning from where you're from.

This pain is unbaring.

 

"Believe it, I'm here."

You tried to convince me.

Guess what's next? You disappear.

The last escapee.

 

Alone in the dark.

No one to rescue.

Nothing to help spark-

- Light in this blackness I've been through.

 

I have moved on,

Or so you say.

My feelings are gone.

Babe, they don't just go away.

 

But f**k it, I'm done.

I'm tired of fighting.

Watch me, I'll run -

- You can take me down biting.

 

Reviews

[MachinaWriter]

Very strong. A great poem about relationships ending. I loved the part that said "Alone in the dark / No one to rescue / Nothing to help spark / -Light in this blackness I've been through". Though I kept wanting to read it as "-a light in the blackness that I've been through". But it works good both ways, so that's just me. Either way, a great poem, thanks for sharing it. ^^ I always love reading your stuff. Keep it up :)

[Apatheia]

Thank you very much, and I know. I originally had "that" in there but I was depating on taking it out so I just did. I'm glad you liked it. :)

[Apatheia]

*debating

[Victorious]

Dear Apatheia,

I do not understand the line where it says, "the last escapee." I felt that was just out there, but other than that, it's emotional, very straightforward. I can say that my favorite stanza would have to be the second one because I can relate to it.

I also liked the stanza before the last one because it makes me think of a story between you two. To me when you said, "my feelings are gone," makes me think that it was a progression and they didn't just go away, but slowly dwindled as time went. At least that's what I interpreted.

Good write. Thanks for sharing.

Sincerely Victorious

God bless

[Claire Twinn]

I like the way the poem moves from anger, to self doubt and back- so true to life. It's tough to make a new start.
I'm not sure unbaring is a word though!

[Apatheia]

Oh wellllll. :P Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

Come a point where we had enough. I like the strong statements and direct emotions in the poem. Some people will test our patience and kindness. I like the complete poem. Thank you sharing the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Apatheia]

Thank you :)

[Marcos Berenguer]

Amazing! I love how you go back to "f**k it, I'm done" at the end. I love flashbacks.
I also like how the sentences get more "intense" of "fast paced" towards the middle of the poem--then, in the end they slow down and are more like how the poem began. Brilliant writing.
This is the part that kind of confuses me, though: "My feelings are gone.
Babe, they don't just go away." You're saying (to him) that your feelings are gone--but not really, cause they won't go away in your head so you're lying just cause you're mad at him?

[Apatheia]

Thank you so much! Im sorry if it confused you. How I said "I have moved on/ or so you say"Whenever I said "My feelings are gone" thats what theyre saying to me. Sorry, I'll try to clear it up. :)

[Marcos Berenguer]

Oh I see. No need to apologize, it's fine--it really is a great poem. :-)

[eatmills]

I love your raw energy in this. So very punchy, nice styling.

[Apatheia]

Thank you very much. :)

[Daliah Valley]

YOu are amazing. All of your work is awesome. You send so many feelings with your words that it just amazes me. You really should write songs.

[Apatheia]

Thank you!

[Tasha]

Nice poem, like MachinaWriter said, about relationships ending. I especially liked the last line 'You can take me down biting'.

[Apatheia]

Thank you. I was iffy on that line. im glad you like it. :)

[Toni Blackerby]

i love ur stuff keep it up

[Apatheia]

Thank you

[Toni Blackerby]

ur welcome