Only way Out

something i felt watching glassmakers in a slum

shuttering eyes need a glass 

a common case in this class 

fire of furnace burning the soul 

bodies struggling to keep up the role 

hope is the tinder for this fire 

freedom is something no longer desired 

best scenario is seeing next day 

worst is what there is no way 

joy is something they're supposed to create 

To consume it one day have to reincarnate...

Reviews

[alf]

Hi Ankur Jain. Your description of the never ending cycle of drudgery is so vivid in your words. hate of a situation drives the body, while hope keeps it alive, even when all hope seems gone. This is a very powerful piece of writing, no holds barred, tell it as it is!!! Love it, alf

[Ankur Jain]

thanks alf...i'm really glad you liked it...:)
it was great reading ur review...
stay connected!

[ANTO]

This is a fine write Ankur. It encapsulates much of life in the tale of a hard-working artisan.
"best scenario is seeing next day" - lifes dreams dwindled away and now concern only survival. Powerful !

[Ilerah]

Really good, deep and well written. Good poem, keep at it.

[Ankur Jain]

thanx for appreciating it...and more than that for reading it :)

[dw817]

Shackled to our emotions or to our mate ? Or are they one and the same ? :)

Nicely written, Ankur. Definite use of personification throughout adds a type of mystical intimacy to it, as if both were speaking. And yes, we all have roles we have set for ourselves and APPEAR to have set for others. Either it is our defense mechanism or our way of whistling through the dark.

[Ankur Jain]

neither emotions or our mate...actually the title was inappropriate
the inspiration of the poem is the miserable condition of the banglemakers of a slum....
So....now i've edited it a bit,,,hope you'll forgive my clumsy mistake..^_^

[dw817]

It looks fine to me, Ankur - and don't feel anything you write is inappropriate, especially with the way you carry words. They are beautiful, meaningful, and insightful. Please consider ...

[Ankur Jain]

thanks buddy..!!

[SAIF ALI]

A very horror demonstration of industrialization. Brilliant.
Guide if i am wrong.

[Ankur Jain]

the way u grasped the hidden message
is as if u were right beside me when i wrote this passage :D

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
so you are a dark knight of poetry.......
masterful imagery......
this is full of hopelessness..........good for this poem.......
again, very well written....
i loved it!!!
:)

[Ankur Jain]

thanks man.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome..............!!! :) :)

[RoyRogers]

This is a wonderful peace it could be a song, I like our poetry.

[Ankur Jain]

thanks Roy.

[Geo Lawrence]

musical ryhtm, you are an artist

[Ankur Jain]

thanks dude!

[Zac]

Good poem
Great depth to this poem
Can you view some of my work

[Ankur Jain]

sure!
that's what we're here for..:)

[Zac]

cool
thanks a lot