An Unsung Tragedy

Pumping the streams of blood

out of the streets near our home

no one eyed the mother

who was still brewing some foam.

Some found it wretched, some ghastly

it wasn't his fault that he died so hastily

Even though he was just a pup

dent on the bumper was worth more than his gut.

Driver kept spitting, thinking his day is ruined

while the public screamed "let's get going"

Apart from the mother everyone forgot

savouring the last whiff of her son she ever got.

Reviews

[alf]

Hi Ankur Jain. Just passing by and found this little gem. A heartbreaking story that could well happen at any time, yet there is such a haunting tone in your words and that catches the readers attention. Well done, I really enjoyed the read, alf

[Zac]

Wow!
This is one of the greatest poems that i have read so far.
Don't stop writing and keep up the good work.

[Ankur Jain]

thanks man..!!
really appreciate your read/review....
stay connected!:D

[Zac]

I will
Can you view some of my poems and give me your opinion,
People keep reading my poems and they don't give comments.
It's really annoying.

[Zac]

Do you know how it feels?

[Ankur Jain]

i'll use my imagination..:D

[Zac]

hahahahahaha

[Ilerah]

Sad, yet well written and a very good poem. Deep, emotional, obviously your a good poet. Keep writing.

[Ankur Jain]

thanks buddy..!!

[Ilerah]

your welcome, glad to help

[R Smith]

very sad and just a little gruesome Ankur but a remarkable write, i see from other comments this was your first write, well its a very, very good piece of work, I can still remember my first and that's a long way back haha but its the one you never quite forget so savour this my friend and enjoy the well deserved praise :)

[Ankur Jain]

thanks sir...
praises are worth a lot when comes from a man of your lot.

[R Smith]

thank you, that's praise from you and much appreciated :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

this is really sad and depressing...........
which is good.....a dark and moving write.....
impressive writing......
i loved it!!!
:)
p.s. 2nd line 2nd word.....should it be "on"?

[Ankur Jain]

i'm glad you liked it Pushkar...
and no! it is "of" in the second line... i had this image of a streak of blood coming towards my home from the street. so that's why..

[Pushkar Prabhat]

oh that explains it......my bad...... :) :)

[J.S. Kloss]

I love your phrasing and story-telling in this! It makes me feel sick to stomach, but it's a great thing for a writer to be able to make readers feel something powerful.

[Ankur Jain]

thanks Jess for taking the time to read...
i sure hope it wasn't too depressing. i'd hate to make u feel anything less than great :)

[RoyRogers]

A wonderful peace, you are a very good poet, I think much better than I.

[Ankur Jain]

thanks Roy!
although i'm nowhere close to being a poet...
this is just the first poem i ever wrote.

[Geo Lawrence]

did this really happen?...
this is a beautifully woven story.

[Ankur Jain]

this is a memory from my childhood...
bt really appreciate ur remark.