Mirage

I lay my head gently up on the plush pillow

Thoughts swarm my lorn mind

I raise my head nimbly from the sunken pillow

For i fear my thoughts disappear

I hold my pen,cold on to the crinkled paper

To free my thoughts 

But stalled am i

Cant move on cant move back.

Author's Note

I honor your criticism!

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

Can't move on can't move back.
- I love this line in particular. great write and keep writing~

[Sid]

That feeling when you want to write but just can't pen down your thoughts, it happens to me as well...you have conveyed the haplessness in that situation very well...great write!

[Tunder]

It's quite awful to be so stuck and be unable to do anything about it. Awesome write and very relatable!

[Reeti]

Random thoughts seem to be really interminable before we fall asleep. You have portrayed the actions or mental doings of a sleeper accurately at this juncture. The narrator appears to be fallen into the snare of his/her own mind. Your 'monkey loop' of thinking has led to creativity other than disturbance. =)

[anxia]

Thanks a lot, Reethi :). YOu totally got the point of this poem!

[Reeti]

So, i have! You're welcome. =)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Mobility impairment? A fatigued morning? Regardless you have captured a fragile moment in this writer's life, nice work.

[anxia]

Thanks! It was a day that i was so inspired to write something, anything but couldnt for my thoughts were fleeting :(

[zainul]

Happens the same to me.
Thanks for sharing real feeling about flitting thought.

[anxia]

Thank you Zainul. Your reviews mean so much to me :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome,dear friend.
I feel very honored by your compliments :)

[Chris]

life as we live it...

[anxia]

Agreed.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

how I felt when who I wrote for I could no longer write for......if that makes any sense.......love it

[anxia]

It definitely does make sense, Neva . Thanks for the review :)

[NibbleLove]

This is a really good poem. I enjoyed reading it :)

[anxia]

thanks, Nibble. Glad that you enjoyed it :)

[Hamza]

oh well,
you always have something innovative in your expressions ..
"But stalled am i
Cant move on cant move back"

sometimes i too feel the same ...
it is like a mirror image to me .. :)

[anxia]

Thanks Hamza for your warm review :)