My Dreams

This is a poem (also a song) about how i feel my dreams are.Pretty please, it would mean the world to me if you guys suggest your precious suggestions to me.Thank you!!! I will be posting more soon.

I fly high, in the sky, my dreams

they shower as dew drops in the dawn,

as the rainfall on a cloudy dusk,

like the sunshine on a summer morn,

as the sweet breeze on a spring eve.

they roar like the thunderstorms,

strike like the lightning,

sparkle like the stars in the night,

dance like the rainbow,

my dreams in the sky, i fly high!!!

Author's Note

Don't ignore anything.what ever you think i should know ,pretty please tell me.thank you so much.

Reviews

[Lizbeth]

This is such a positive, short piece of writing! I was sorry when it came to an end :)
Loved the beautiful imagery in the lines:
"sparkle like the stars in night,
dance like the rainbow,"

Only changes I would make are in line 1: delete space before my and add one after sky, ...
Line 3: should that be falls?
Line 10, space after sky.
Thanks for sharing,
Lizbeth

[anxia]

Thank you tons, Lizbeth for your detailed review.I love that sort of reviews.you see,they are the stepping stones to success.
And i believe it should be fall ,like a rain fall.
And sorry about the spacing *bites tongue* i didn't see them.Thank you once again for your sincere review.:)

[Sugar and Spice]

This is beautiful I love it, very clever wording and phrasing :)
~ Sugar and Spice

[anxia]

Thank you so much sugar and spice!! :)If you want to give me points of improvement ,please feel free to do so.

[zainul]

Very creative and imaginative piece.
The writer compelled me to watch me whatever he did with the dreams.
Flying dreams and getting them back as many mundane things is an amazing idea.

[anxia]

Thank you so much Zainul sir!! :)If you want to give me points of improvement ,please feel free to do so.

[zainul]

Thank you for your polite approach.
I feel that poem comes as a revelation.
What you have written is the best for the moment.
You will be inspired from your inside to revise in due time.

[anxia]

Thank you, sir.

[zainul]

You are most welcome,talented poet.