My Dreams

This is a poem (also a song) about how i feel my dreams are.Pretty please, it would mean the world to me if you guys suggest your precious suggestions to me.Thank you!!! I will be posting more soon.

I fly high, in the sky, my dreams

they shower as dew drops in the dawn,

as the rainfall on a cloudy dusk,

like the sunshine on a summer morn,

as the sweet breeze on a spring eve.

they roar like the thunderstorms,

strike like the lightning,

sparkle like the stars in the night,

dance like the rainbow,

my dreams in the sky, i fly high!!!

Author's Note

Don't ignore anything.what ever you think i should know ,pretty please tell me.thank you so much.

Reviews

[Aehr]

amazing imagery....
this one is beautiful.. and its going in to my library!!!

[anxia]

Aw thank you:)

[Aehr]

you are absolutely welcome! thank you for the friend request...
This one is so short, meaningful and beautiful - it totally made my day!

[anxia]

My pleasure!I need to thank you for accepting it:)

[Admiral Kirk]

OOH! It's so upbeat, almost inspirational! Like a giant mushroom! Um... I'll figure out how to explain that one in a second. I like this poem, it's really cool... It's like... I'm flying... or something... Oh, back to the mushroom. Well... Um... Can't give up on this one... OH! A mushroom, or a toadstool, or whatever you'd call it, is perhaps one of the most hated plants there is... If you see a mushroom on your lawn, chances are, you'll step on it. So for a mushroom to grow so very large even through all that stomping and weed killer... My, that's inspiration at its finest. So in this way, your poem is, and always will be in my mind, a giant mushroom.

-Nobody

[Sami Khalil]

I like the line :
dance like the rainbow.
Nice

[anxia]

Thank you so much Sami for checking it out!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome

[SmileBig :)]

This is so good! I love it; nothing wrong with this poem! Great job :)

[anxia]

Thank you, Missy.Glad you loved it.

[SmileBig :)]

No problem

[R J Askew]

I like this. Tis positive. The sky is a great place for our dreams to be.

[anxia]

Thank you very much,Askew!

[Ariel Olivia]

Beautiful. I love this.

[anxia]

Thank you, Olivia.Glad you loved it!

[Ariel Olivia]

You're welcome, keep up the good work!:)

[anxia]

I will with guidance from you all!!

[eeoopig]

I have only ever read one poem from you, and it was good. But this is great! I love this poem - it gives a real sense of freedom and happiness. It was very descriptive, flowed well and had great use of words. Good job :) I love the similes used it it - a beautiful piece

[anxia]

Thank you so much, Eeoopig!!I am really happy that you liked it.Keep coming back for more

[eeoopig]

Your welcome and Will do :D

[Lee]

I truly enjoyed the rhyme and flow of this piece. Your descriptions are refreshing and vividly clear. I would have liked to see capitalization though. It would have really made this something solid.

[anxia]

Thank you,Lee.I will do the capitalization.Thank you once again for you review.

[anxia]

I love this, because you're living pure and open to see and feel every nature aspect so well. Thank you for the friend request, and sharing your poetry here

E.L.

[anxia]

It's my pleasure,E.L.And am glad you loved it!Please feel free to correct me.:)

[Sam]

I thought this was really well written. I loved the sensory part of it, and how you compared it from beautiful to dangerous. My favorite line is "Sparkle like stars in the night" Theres something about that line that is very appealing to me. Good Job.

[anxia]

Thank you Sam for your precious review.I am glad you liked it that much! :)